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Teen Poetry #1

i really need your input

Jenn
New Member

since 1999-08-04

Posts 8
Clay,New York United States

0 posted 1999-08-04 09:25 PM

It hit me so hard, when I stood in the yard.
And waited to see you , I tried not to be blue.
As I started walking towards the door, I thought of how much you adored,
All your family and friends.
I finally reached you a long whil later, And I began to tatter.
The mood was so sad, I kissed your sweet hand.
I looked at your face, as my heart began to race.
Time felt like it flew as I stood there looking at you.
I asked my self why, Why I had to say goodbye,
To such and understanding kid, who never ever hid,
How you felt, you just dealt.
I didn't want you to leave, I was hoping it was just a trick up your sleave.
But when i looked down i realzed you had died, and I stood there and cried.

CrAyZeD
Junior Member

since 1999-08-03

Posts 45

1 posted 1999-08-04 09:44 PM

i liked this poem it built some suspense on what was goin on.the endin sent chills down my spine

Jenn
New Member

since 1999-08-04

Posts 8
Clay,New York United States

2 posted 1999-08-04 10:02 PM

thanx, i apperciate it.

@-------{------ Jenn

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