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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
she entered my life with a beat of my heart now im shattered as we brake apart my mind so clear myhead so dull as thoughts of death cross through my skull they say there are millions of fish in the sea but she was my cathc special for me i can have so much more wenever i need so y split my wrists and watch my slef bleed? memories of u run through my mind but of good ones i still can not find first i see u then i see mud then i see my bodie swamped in blood ppl say the end is farther then near but i see the end its right over here many ppl remember a smile on my face but now htey say "depression has taken over its plase" now death will come and i will die all depending on how my bodie lie deaht will hopefully come by tommorow so life can end in pittiful sorrow ------------------ Mike1Sacks@aol.com |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
i won $10,000 for this 1 ------------------ Mike1Sacks@aol.com |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Yet another poem of yours that I absolutely love to pieces.Congrats on the 10thou. ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe *A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive* |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
to see if thats considered anoyin u |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
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*~*butterfly*~* Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 28minnesota |
nice work  i really like this one, the best ive read of your work. really deep and sad, i can relate to some parts. keep it up!!*later* ~kas~ |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
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Black Rain Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 60California, USA |
This is soooo sad, but wonderful. It deserved the 10,000 in my opinion, definately one of the best poems i've read in a long time. But then again, all of your poems catch my attention and all of those girls don't know what they are missing. keep posting so i can read them. black rain------------------ "I'm just a girl...standing in front of a boy...asking him to love her." - Notting Hill |
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Slim Shady Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 32Phoenix, AZ, USA |
That was the most moving thing I have ever read. ------------------ "That's Rock Bottom When this life makes you mad enough to kill... That's Rock Bottom When you want something bad enough you'll steal... That's Rock Bottom When you feel you have had it up to here Cause you mad enough to scream but you sad enough to tear" Words by the Slim Shady |
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ILoveJ Junior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 16Eugene, Or, US |
It sounds as if you poured all yourself into it. I think you have written the most beatiful poem I have and will ever read. Thank you so much for writing this, it really is great. Is this poem make believe or true? |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
true |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
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Starr_Scott Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26Brownwood, Texas, USA |
I don't know about this one. Kinda depressing What's up with slitting the wrist thing? I mean come on you erally willing to give up your life because you can't have some girl? Just my opinion but it was a good poem just liven it up. Keep it up. Starr |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
seth/ |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
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CrAyZeD Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 45 |
Dont tell me that your the infamous Seth from brooklyn. The one who tags up everywhere. If thats you then small world. ------------------ Dont bet your money on fast horses, bet your money on slow rabits. |
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