Teen Poetry #1 |
My Boyz |
pun83 Junior Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 26FALMOUTH ,MA. U.S.A |
MY BOYZ ARE MY DOGGZ WE BE CHILLIN ALL THE TIME ALWAYS ON LOGGZ WE STAY AWAY FROM CRIME MY BOYZ GOT TO GET JOBZ SO WE CAN STAY ALIVE WE'LL ACT LIKE CALVIN AND HOBBZ SO WE CAN THRIVE MY BOYZ GOT TO STICK TOGETHER YOU KNOW HOW WE ARE WE'LL BE AS LIGHT AS A FEATHER IN ARE BRAND NEW CAR I AM GOING TO PUT YOU AT EASE SO I GUESS WE'LL JUST SAY PEACE!!! |
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melvin New Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 5 |
stop tryin to be thug hard yo cuz you aint dawg!! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What Pun!! This one definitely follows the rhyme scheme of a sonnet - now we need to work on your iambic pentameter.... |
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mikehunt New Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 9Falmouth, MA, USA |
r u ur own parrot? [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-29-99).] |
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deannamarie Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43WI |
Why can't you all critique in a decent way? Actually, I'd say "Grow up, you're not in kindergarden anymore" Now let's watch and see how much hate mail I get. |
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TIAJAH1434EVER New Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 5FALMOUTH,MA. 02536 |
that was very succinct [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-29-99).] |
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