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DarkAngel New Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 4brick,NJ, USA |
I am sitting here dying. A razor in one hand, Blood dripping down the other. I am dying because I have the greatest pain. The greatest pain is not the pain of death, But the pain of being ignored. The greatest pain is not the pain of death, But the pain of being forgotten. I have been left in the shadows. I have been forgotten. My friends are much to busy to console me. Now it seems that the only person who cares about me Is me. I take my last breath, and lie down on my bed I look out my window and pray. I pray that my dark angel will come and take me away. |
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Black Rain Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 60California, USA |
That is so sad, I was deeply touched by your poem, as most people I have felt like this. Keep up the good work. ------------------ "Each of us are angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." - Luciano de Crescenzo |
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AnGeL666 Junior Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 12Minnetonka |
Iliked you poem, but I think that suicide is just another thing to be added to the list of chickening out. |
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VelvetLuna Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 10Canada |
I feel the same way. I really liked your poem...so much intense emotion...a painfully sad poem. |
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Acid Angel Junior Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 17Austin, TX, US |
I feel like that every day of my life, its a sad way to go but its the last choice, huh? this poem is sad but true, Keep thinking up these great poems..Iwas very moved. Keep thinking beyond the limit. |
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V-dog New Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 9Farmville,NC,USA |
such a deep poem man i like it a lot. |
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*~*butterfly*~* Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 28minnesota |
your poem is so deep and so touching, i think a lot of people can relate to feeling this way. i can relate, but its makes me sad to know that there is soo many people out there that feel like this. anyways, keep your head up i love your work!  later* |
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Tanya Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43Brooklyn, NY, USA |
wow your poem its so sad but its also true for some people. I just wish no one would have to feel such pain. <333Tanya<333 |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Been there, done that, lived through the sequel. It was a great poem and so completely true. It's not as easy as one might think to write a poem about suicide but you did a great job. It's ashame people feel like this but they do..which is the sad part. Suicide has nothing to do with 'chickening out'..it pisses me off when people who don't know talk about suicide like they do. And some lil' teeny-boppers going 'oh yeah, I understand'...can we say bullshit? Well anywayz...it was a great poem and I really hope that things aren't that horrible for you and if they are then hang in there..it'll get better. Trust me, I speak from experience. **************DarkEnchantress*************** |
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pun83 Junior Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 26FALMOUTH ,MA. U.S.A |
that was such a beautiful poem the way you describe the feeling is UNBELIEVABLE i can really relate. i just hope i never have to stoop that low. hope to read more from you.  |
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habeebpetersen@hotmail Junior Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 28falmouth MA usa |
dat waz dizneep |
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Addie Anne Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46norman, oklahoma- usa |
wow, very nice job. i know what it's like too. it's not fun. it's unfair for kids like us to have to go through such shit. it's usually caused by our parents or some other role modle that we look up to. i'm not sure what the case is with you but the reason for my suffering all started with my father. you know how to get into the depths of your feelings, but you can make it so understandable. i really liked it. i hope to read more. addie |
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earthangel Junior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 10 |
call me intuitive or just really looking out for my fellow gen-Xer's but, your poem frightened me. are you in need of a shoulder to cry on or a wall to punch or just a face to talk to with huge listening ears? look, i don't even know you but i sense pain and repressed feelings...my e-mail is crazya18@mindspring.com, write to me if you wanna talk... |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Great poem.I have been in the position with a razor in one hand and blood running down the other-literally, but I survived and got help.I feel much better now even if it is just the medication.Hope you will feel better soon too. ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
Well I can definitely relate. I too felt that life was all too overwhelming. I wished for death all too soon.I thought that there was no meaning too life. I wanted to take my own life and was at the end of my rope.There's no pain greater than feeling like your left all alone.But gradually it all has gotten better, and I hope the same for you.I just wanted to say that i hope you get over this feeling. Don't call Death before It calls you! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Powerful work here, amazingly moving, I'm glad I stopped in tonight. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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