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Teen Poetry #1

This thing we call love

David
Junior Member

since 1999-07-03

Posts 10

0 posted 1999-07-04 01:38 PM

Tossing, Turning
Rushing, Churning
These thoughts of mine.

In anguish torment
I will not find
Peace of mind

Lover's embrace
Yet I seek
Hard not to be
Very meek.

A place to be
A place to see
A nether place
Without a face.

In tranquility,
An angels breath
A kittens meow
A curiosity.

That leaves its mark
On each young man's heart
This thing we call
Love.

Talia
Junior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 25
Colorado Springs, CO, USA

1 posted 1999-07-07 04:09 PM

Your poem's rhythym is wonderfully unsteady as love tends to be. I don't know if was intentional, but it certainly adds to the effect of it. Nice work.

Delilah
Junior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 36
The Wonderful America

2 posted 1999-07-08 01:34 AM

Wow! I loved it! awesome job, David!

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Delilah
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