A brand spankin' new poem. So read it please :)

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StratMatt
Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 87
Macomb, IL, U.S.A.

0 posted 1999-09-23 05:40 PM

Looking in her eyes
makes a captive of my heart.
Listening to her voice
makes me long to have a part
of her heart, of her mind,
of her soul, of her life.
To have her in my arms
would end all my strife.

I would give all I have
just for one quick glance
from those enslaving brown eyes
which give me no chance
to escape from their power;
They make a prisoner of my soul.
And taking it empty
They soon leave it full.

To run my hands through the strands
of her bright golden hair,
would end all my stress.
About nothing else would I care.
Watching her movements
makes my heart race
With astonishment for
her amazing grace.

My only goal is to be
the object of her affection.
To attain this dream
I'd go in any direction.
North, south, east, west
I'd walk forever for just one kiss
I'd do anything, I'd pass any test
Just for that kiss, all else I'd dismiss.

To have a place in her heart,
I'd give up my place in this life.
To hold a place in her soul
I'd take on all the world's strife.
To have her love, I would take
all the world's suffering and pain.
For her love would soothe me,
I'd have nothing left to gain.

And if that time should come
that I should win her love.
I would soar so high
I'd be so far above
the trees, the streams, the hills, the grass,
and the people unaware of how it feels.
But she would be right there with me
knowing my love for her is real.

But if the day would come
when she should care to leave.
My life would then soon end.
Death would be the way I'd grieve.
But if she should always stay
I'd know our love was true.
But I no longer need to search,
because I think "she" might be you.

I've found a new subject to write about, so I may end up with a lot of new sappy poetry for a couple of weeks before I actually have the guts to ask her out and be rejected. :P
Anyway, enjoy, and give me some comments please.

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"Lost time is never found again." -Ben Franklin.

Jim Raynor
Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 63
Churubusco Indiana USA

1 posted 1999-09-23 06:29 PM

the poems is everything including funny and also i think you were trying to make this sign :þ that looks more like a tounge ya know

-Jim

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Love hurts when your flying solo. -Jim Raynor

StratMatt
Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 87
Macomb, IL, U.S.A.

2 posted 1999-09-23 10:01 PM

I prefer :P quite honestly.
Also, what do you mean specifically by the "funny" part about the poem?

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

3 posted 2000-01-18 01:46 PM

you know? in your poem..I could actually visualize what she looks like...excellent description...very beautiful work

Laura
Junior Member

since 1999-11-26

Posts 26

4 posted 2000-02-01 10:24 PM

Your poem is so wonderful! I love the ending. I wish the girl would realize how wonderful you are and how passionatly you feel for her. I hope everything works out!

thebob
Junior Member

since 2000-02-16

Posts 15

5 posted 2000-02-17 12:05 PM

the poem was very discriptive. by now you probably ask the girl out so good luck. the poem was very good in any case. sorry i didn't reply before but i wasn't a member till now. write on.
the bob

Phoebee
Junior Member

since 2000-07-09

Posts 42
Peoria, AZ

6 posted 2000-07-09 08:03 PM

So few guys have the passion that you have. Don't lose it. If she is a smart girl....she'll never let you go.

Fairy Princess
Member

since 2000-07-19

Posts 64
Fitchburg Ma, USA

7 posted 2000-07-20 12:07 PM

You remind me of my boyfriend, your a very nice b/f you know. Peace out! ~*~Fairy Princess~*~

NathanS
Member

since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
CA

8 posted 2001-10-24 11:31 PM

Great poem man

I liked it a lot.
Ya know, look at it like this: if you ask her out, and she says yes, they hazzah!!
If you ask her out, and she says no; things happen, and life does move on. Sometimes its difficult, but hey, life moves on. What walls contain you other then the ones you put up?

-Dreys
Weeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-11-13 07:48 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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