i have a poem, i was wondering if anyone like it

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i have a poem, i was wondering if anyone like it

nick_lyss
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since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

0 posted 2006-08-28 06:52 PM

A fantasy
life is nothing more than a fantasy
always lookin perfect
never caught with a mistake to look
down on others.haircuts to the max.nails gleaming.
all this is a fantasy. noone knows how to live without hightecstuff.life is nothing more than a fantasy

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2006-08-29 04:53 PM

your poem is good but here are two hints:

1) check your spelling
2) work on structure

Good work!

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

2 posted 2006-09-02 06:37 PM

My late son used to call it "plastic people" It's amazing how much stuff people can be brainwashed into thinking they need, isn't it?

Rae

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