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The Challenge of I Am (this one's for you Ringo-lovie)
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The Challenge of I Am (this one's for you Ringo-lovie) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I am confused. I'm incomplete. I wonder who the hell is "me"? I hear voices from the past. I see silver in my hair. I want the truth and the last laugh. I'm confused. I'm incomplete. I pretend that it's all good. I even feel it's as it should be--I touch the silver strands and worry that it ages me. Sometimes I cry myself to sleep. I am confused. I'm incomplete. I understand the mystic sage. I say "peace" as I act rage. I dream myself all shiny new. I try to make that dream come true. I hope I'm not ridiculous. I'm so confused. I'm incomplete. * * * For Ringo, and the challenge: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000645.html I'm looking forward to reading the offerings of you all.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want the truth and the last laugh. loving you for that line.... (ykikykik)and? smiling at you for your constructive crit line.  and? its just so right that you rhyme your "I am"  You are leather and lace... sugar and spice with a touch of grace. one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
It seems General Lee was both of our's daddy...  |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
I think you did very well with the challenge, I will try my own later. Blessings! |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Karen- This is absolutely amazing, as always. Changing the style of this while still following the challenge shows just how great you are. I loved every word. In the wooden chair |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo Ringo, m'lady.  Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you ~Buckingham/Nicks |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Suddenly I feel so normal! Good on ya, serenity~ thanks for this. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Amazing..this, and you. hugs, Chrislane Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God, I thought you were talking about me for a sec . . . Karen? This is beautiful, like you. Well met indeed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Well done and I loooove this! Hugs pretty lady~ ~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Absolutely amazing lady.. yep, only you can do it the way you do! wonderful  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I want the truth and the last laugh." oh me too...me toooooo  understanding this and relating... so very well done Karen  |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
I really like this one and yes I am having the last laugh but I know I may never know the truth and who knows if I ever will. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all, for taking the time to read and reply. This is one of my favorite challenges, and it is a challenge, too, to periodically re-evaluate how I define myself. "I want the truth and the last laugh"? *smile* Shucks, there ain't no sinister motive to that. That's just me laughing at myself again, as I recognize that perceptions of reality as truth are so often convenient to my mood. Just my way of slapping myself around a bit. A bit of self-mockery, if you will.  Thanks again and thanks Ringo. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I keep saying... you are amazing.... and I wish I knew me as well as you know you! |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
Awesomely good poem in answer to the challenge. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karen, you did a great job on the challenge! I'm missing you.....be in touch soon. ......jo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Serenity, your the entire package, the call center for poets...the sun in the sky, our midnight cowgirl with a six gun of words, with that gleam in your eye, your the spring of springs, the mom of smiles, the grace of a soft wind, and the heartbeat of creativity... Well done!!!!! Enjoyed reading this |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am glad this came back up Karen, cuz today...I swear I am you.. and I WANT the damn last laugh today... sigh...but I dont know if I will get it... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*shaking my head* You folks amaze me. And Lee? and extra and a thank you |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
"I say "peace" as I act rage." A place we have all gone,,,very nice job No one really cares,,why should I? |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I feel like hugging you! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
~ and you are a delightfully real enigma! EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
You are Karen, You are serenity I wonder what that is You hear voices from the past. I see echoes from your lair. You want the truth and I, the last laugh. I'm perhaps. You are serenity. I pretend that your pretence is good. I even feel that’s what is right I hear the sounds and expect that it births me. Sometimes I cajole me to sleep. You are Karen. You are serenity. You understand the mystic rage. I say "peace" as I write a page. I dream myself to write as good as you. I dream to make that true. I hope I'm not frivolous. I'm maybe. You are yourself replete. ... is it ok if I ask you ...? to write a duet? I mean (I am blocked in my head and can't string few words to save my life) please don't mind my being me regards sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I thought you'd never ask. I'll drop you an "e" and we'll see if we can make something happen. and thanks sudhir. It's lovely to be asked. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I understand the mystic sage. I say "peace" as I act rage. I dream myself all shiny new. I try to make that dream come true. I hope I'm not ridiculous. I'm so confused. I'm incomplete. my god, this is one of the most honest writes anyone could imagine posting and I am so in tune, but beyond you with the number of grey hairs and yet? I think I look OK for a woman almost 60, and still can turn a head and YOU???? are gorgeous in every way  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You understand the mystic rage. I say "peace" as I write a page. I dream myself to write as good as you. I dream to make that true. * see, Sudhi knows |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Methinks I'd have to see your driver's license to believe it. and thank you, lady... (this is me, reeling myself back in... ) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
and there is so much beauty to reel in m'dear soul, mind, body...you are our Pips premiere passionate poet, Lady Serenity Blaze |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Ms Serenity. It is so good to know YOU. You are so real, sweet Lady. Hugs, Ethel |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Serenity, I admire you and those other brave souls who have taken Ringo's challenge. When I looked at it, I wondered how it could be written in such a way that it would flow as smooth as silk, yet reflect the inner core. I am amazed how you have so expertly accomplished this. (I wish I had time to respond to all who took this challenge! It has been eye-opening to see how we perceive ourselves! I see such similarities in others' perceptions and my own, especially yours.) Take care, miscellanea |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I understand the mystic sage. I say "peace" as I act rage." "The valley spirit is not dead: They say it is the mystic female. Her gateway is, they further say, The base of earth and heaven." ~ Lao Tzu ~ |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
you speak for me, except I color my silver hair~~ ~A~ |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow this is so truthful. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
exactly Lexy, is why I came back to read it . . . I do not know her any other way TG. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Just reminded me that one time I told a girlfriend, that I wanted the truth. Did she in fact have two boyfriends, she said only one, and I said, well if you have two you have to get rid of one, will that be me or him. James |
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