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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2005-01-13 03:57 AM

So like a dreamed landmass beyond the sailor’s reach
love’s dulcet tones had whispered of tomorrows
Just when a lad or lass sheds pride to it beseech
an undertow will drown their hope in sorrows
Illusion casts a raft that rides into the breech,
after its plunge one grasps to beg or borrow
all that floats is hope to one torn from love’s beach
?
and alone one there dare swim when no oar rows

How does one summon strength to buoy above the brine,
to persevere, to tread, to carry on,
live as though some fate remains where stars align
beyond such painful dark some hopeful dawn?
That question won’t abate, its answer e’re dismays
knowledge is an anchor and it weighs
?

Poets against the war is redundant

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-01-13 04:15 AM

First I want to thank you (quite seriously) for highlighting the hidden acrostic message here--it's late and I'm into my cups as they say...

But I did read that first, so your first line there had all the more impact...I got the distinct feeling of a windless day on the ocean here--

"
So like a dreamed landmass beyond the sailor’s reach
love’s dulcet tones had whispered of tomorrows"

(and I've always just loved the word dulcet, it's a seductive descriptive thing)

and my windless day is further described with this:

"and alone one there dare swim when no oar rows"

and the questioning of god/gods/fate:

"live as though some fate remains where stars align"

smile

yer a lovely poet yanno?

because...

"knowledge is an anchor and damn boy does it weigh"

thanks for waking me up this a.m.

I totally enjoyed this Richard.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2005-01-13 05:24 AM

what can I say? this is awesome!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2005-01-13 07:38 AM

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(too lazy to fill in the rest right now)

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-01-13 08:07 AM

I think...yeah, I hear ya going "oh boy"

we are social disaster, we train our little ones in a romantic fantasy love which lasts forever...and it can...it's just that real true love endures the bad as well as the good...maturly enjoying the child growing, even in mistake?

Shheesh, what did I just say?

Did that make sense?

Morning Sir, love your style

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2005-01-13 08:13 AM

damn.

I came back to beg the inked one to post that...

a great reply, and even all by itself,

an excellent statement.

(Post it, mish)

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2005-01-13 08:48 AM

Excellent acrostic Richard.
Much enjoyed and it made me stop and think.
Hugs~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2005-01-13 11:47 AM

This is something I need to save and read over and over...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2005-01-13 11:56 AM

L'amore concorda tutti!
(Love concurs all).

I agree with inkedgoddess.

JL

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2005-01-13 12:40 PM

From one that no longer wishes to go in any water, you know I understand this one. The analogy you used for the weight of this knowledge was pretty impressive, and more than accurate

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2005-01-13 01:23 PM

Richard

Youth yearns for love and is not mature enough to hold it...yet years cause the weight from it to be to heavy it begs to hold or drown. But, yes...hope floats at any time, if we but trust it.

I really enjoyed the format of this Richard...so very well done!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2005-01-13 01:56 PM

Love, when built on trust and faith
Holds answers to questions of the unknown.
The power of truth and honesty create
Keys unlocking doorways of love yet unshown;
To give gift of knowing what pain love can abate,
Healing spirits, that they might once again soar~

Your words inspired me, I do hope you don't mind to much. This is INCREDIBLE Richard and very much so a

for me.....for many many reasons.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (01-13-2005 03:04 PM).]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

12 posted 2005-01-13 02:08 PM

Awesome piece of work. Chris

You said you'd give me light-
But you never told me about the fire
Stevie Nicks

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2005-01-13 03:00 PM

Still trying to figure it out myself..excellent idea and execution

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

14 posted 2005-01-13 06:51 PM

well done... indeed!!!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

15 posted 2005-01-13 06:56 PM

I am so impressed! Great write!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

16 posted 2005-01-13 07:04 PM

This is...
A
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(yes, i am too lazy to think up my own idea.

)

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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