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The Glass of Air that Separates
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The Glass of Air that Separates |
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Martie
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The Glass of Air that Separates In the room I roamed with ear pressed against the glass of air that separated my table from theirs. Lost to my companion, consumed by a conversation from behind, words with no faces. A toast to beginnings and endings, what do you say? I heard. Out with the old, in with the new. To beginnings and endings, and to truth, no matter what. I looked up to the clear eyed watch of my companion, who understood the nature of my listening. A toast, I thought, a brown table, a glass, the napkin with a wet circle. How many things are permanent? The circle, a symbol of continuity and continuation, yet, this circle will be gone soon, dried up and thrown away, carted off and dumped into a landfill and forever changed. Are we in life, like the napkin, imprinted, used and thrown away? He touched the circle on my finger, the symbol of our love, he touched it with his own. Uncertain of direction I listened still. I toast to truth and just straight lines, I heard. I looked down at our hands now interlocked warm on warm and raised my glass. To circles, I said. ---------- a poem written from a scene in a piece of fiction I am writing. [This message has been edited by Martie (03-22-2004 12:12 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie -- this was lovely and I sense holding much hope! ........  .........jo |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ahh...indeed. Circles. Everything is coming to me in such a timely way...it does not surprise me, nor should it, that you would be one of them to bring me even more proof. To circles! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
very moving  ...now wanting to read the "piece of fiction" you are writing! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie... I don't have the words... but you know... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Excellent and this is not fiction.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
one of my favorites... you know this. You are so lovely Martie... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Martie, I was stunned when I read this from you, but taken but it at the same time. A toast, I thought, a brown table, a glass, the napkin with a wet circle. How many things are permanent? The circle, a symbol of continuity and continuation, yet, this circle will be gone soon, dried up and thrown away, carted off and dumped into a landfill and forever changed. Are we in life, like the napkin, imprinted, used and thrown away? Then, you did it. You resolved this with a happy ending. At that that, I thought, "Yep, that's Martie!" I enjoyed this very much, and would also like to read the piece of fiction! Sadie |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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A beautifully written poignant piece, Martie. Very well done. I'm sure I've told you before that I envy your mind? I do, I do. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Here's to circles...no beginning and no end. ~Hugs sweet lady~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~  Your heart touches mine repeatedly ...~ ALWAYS the circle of friendship returns me to where I want to be~  Beautiful piece dearest poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
what a wonderful poem Martie - a soft but perceptive look into some of the ponderings of life and love - loved it - Paul |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!! Eric |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I think we would be somewhat surprised at what the circle encompasses but until then, here's to your poetry and fiction writing. Good luck! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I think the fiction you are writing will be truly special to judge from this scene, so masterfully written. Love, Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Call it poetry, call it fiction, whatever you like, I like what this says, and how it is written.... _______ice ><> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
To circles indeed.... smiling at you Martie. This is indeed masterfully written. MBeauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful title... opening the door to an incredible write! *S* And knowing your talent, the whole will be every bit as incredible as this scene. *S* |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
...by and by Lord by and by... Excellent! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"a poem written from a scene in a piece of fiction I am writing." Yes, perhaps....but there is much more than fiction in this. Much, much more. I'm glad I looked back in here, in time to find this beauty. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
"To circles" Nicely said. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Funny, this doesn't quite read like fiction. Lovely! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you good people for your wonderful replies. And, I admit...not totally fiction...the fiction that I write comes from my heart, and things I've experienced...therefore from truth. Also, I am a listener at restaurants......I tell my husband that I'm gathering information for my book. |
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