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Dark Poetry #4

My dark senryu challenge

TwiztidKarma
Junior Member

since 2006-09-22

Posts 43
Florida

0 posted 2006-10-04 01:22 AM

                        I am dark and cold
                       Crimson red is what I see
                        As me and you bleed.



            Senryu
      Line 1. 5 syllables
      Line 2. 7 syllables
      Line 3. 5 syllables

Moonkist
Member

since 2006-09-29

Posts 197
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2006-10-04 06:01 AM

Bleeding from the heart
Never taking for granted
Our will in light... d a r k

Freedom Now

Moonkist
Member

since 2006-09-29

Posts 197
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2006-10-04 06:04 AM

Bleeding from the heart
Never taking for granted
Our will in light... d a r k

I forgot to comment, TwiztidKarma...
Very good one! Captured well.
~Moonkist

Freedom Now

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

3 posted 2006-10-04 10:07 AM

Agreed! This is very good!
I really love the feeling behind it.

~Kira

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