Screendoors-C'pats challenge

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Open Poetry #28

Screendoors-C'pats challenge

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

0 posted 2003-09-10 05:40 PM

I pressed my face
against the
screen door
and watched the children
play

and wished for a wish

that would take away
the years
and allow me to run
outside
slamming that screen door shut
shouting
"I got first base"

instead I am reminded
of glimpses through screen doors
as the little one
runs outside
screaming

"homeworks done, see you at nine!"

SPUD
Junior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 12

1 posted 2003-09-10 05:48 PM

Go for it, fling those doors open. I would and do and Im 34. Maybe you should get a dog. People go bananas when they have a dog prancing around and so on but it always seems socially acceptable. Or is it just me? lol.
Very charming poem.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-09-10 05:55 PM

shouting
"I got first base"

yep or at least turn it back enough to be 17 so i can get to thirdbase or home..lol

great write Jason

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2003-09-10 07:01 PM

Nice work Jason.. the screen alowing you to see out, but keeping you in, away from the things you would like to do as you remember... the invisible barriers we or time build for us...

I'd say you met the challenge well...

bravo!

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart