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Happy in my oblivion (sad attempt to be happy..sue's challenge)
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Happy in my oblivion (sad attempt to be happy..sue's challenge) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Sue has given a challenge that we reverse our writing styles..romantic writers write sad and disturbing..dark writers write happy. This is going to kill me  Lie there in the sun- happy in my oblivion... I open the windows in the sun, close them in the rain Looked at others and wondered: Whats wrong with life? I don't want to grow up Chase chickens in the yard, sing them to sleep at night... Try to find the stars- why did they hide? I was seven then- My favorite color was yellow And guess what? it is again. (I'm sorry sue..I really can't think of the happiest moment of my life right now. (actualy, I'm pretty happy at this moment) Thats as bright as I'm going to get  )[This message has been edited by Wind (07-26-2003 08:55 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hey, I'll take it! I think you did a wonderful job with this write! I do believe I saw your pixie smile!   EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
That's IT. I am now going to come after you and feed you Mai Tai's and ticklings. (scared yet?) This IS lovely, but? if y'don't mind me saying so, you didn't write HAPPY NOW. You wrote innocence at age seven??? surely lovie, SURELY (I won't call you Shirley) SOMETHING makes you laugh. I'll find it, dammit.  serenity exits, determined.... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
my..aren't we picky...I am happy right now...isn't that enough? [This message has been edited by Wind (07-26-2003 09:14 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wind? Not picky. There is a famous movie, (The Way We Were) ala Barbra Streisand and Robert Redford. His character tells HER the same thing. "You PUSH too much--constantly...pushing me on--" Here La Steisand interrupts (of course) and holds his face and says, "Ah...but? look what I've got..." not getting all romantic with ya, but YOU get the idea? er...doncha? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
phhllltt! I'm starting to absolutely dispise this poem  sigh..what's wrong with me? |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ah sweet Wind - if only you could see the smiles on the faces of we who read your poetry. Then you would be happy for sure. No wonder yellow is your favourite colour - just like my favourite flowers that are bulging out of the railings in my garden. Bringing forth more joy than they know. lol....Karen is smooshy and she doesn't realize it me thinks The Way We Were...one of my favourite movies just for the part where Streisand lightly moves Redfords hair away from his eyes!! swooning here. Are ya feeling a little queazy yet?  I wonder what type of poetry I would write for this challenge? I don't have a form of my own...do I? Oh, I am rambling. Great write me friend! hugs, Chris |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
SMOOSHY? roflmao |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ya...smooshy...or shmoozey..mushy...you know!! I bet you even listen to Barry Manilow... You know I love ya Karen....ya smoozey, smearmy, secret romantic!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, you get smooshy... Wind...too many responses here so you can't be asking for us to delete this...but there was a time somewhere in your past that you were deliriously happy - find it [I don't care if it was age 18 months and someone changed your diaper] - because I KNOW you have it in you to take this challenge and run with it! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Liz, sometimes when I read your bantering in discussions...I see you happy. So even if you write sad or longing for more of life, remember the fun you have with others on here and don't forget, you have so much life ahead of you and with your talent and personality I predict you shall go far~ hugs Maureen |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
heh. I know, I'm fine. I just don't like this style very much. It's not me. But I guess that's the point. lets just let this slip into the cracks..shall we? [This message has been edited by Wind (07-26-2003 11:20 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Raph just sits and grins the discussions this has sparked and at Liz pouting in the corner and stomping her feet |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
lol Raph..Ser says I'm your keeper now. Whatever that means. Why did you bump THIS one. out of all of the ones you could of picked |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
my keeper? maybe it means everybody else gave up on me?  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah yeah, this is great stuff...thanks for sharing...enjoyed the thread today |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz!!! You did it . . . lmao over here . . . sorry please do not ever ever apologize for trying EVER! I have to write about HOPE HA! ahahaha you can laugh at that one too and this is a happy thought even if it isnt now Challenge well met (although I know we shall find a happy bone in your closet) xxoo |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
i would happily chase chickens in the yard. do you have chickens? wish i did. when i grow up, i'm having chikkkkkuns!!! this is such a trademark liz poem, and i love it when they so stand out. i dunno, theyre just...liz. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
used to have chickens  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Liz!! What did you do with the chickens??  Ooooh Noooo you didn't??!!  See..you did write 'happy'...everyone is smiling.. Look at us! ~Hugs sweetie~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I'm sorry that I'm bumping this, but I DO like it. I might have read it wrong, though.... to me, it sounds very melancholy.... heh. Kielo I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me.... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
heh...i didn't eat them E... Keilo! i know it's sad..but for me this is like...dunno |
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