Open Poetry #27 |
Kiss Of Death (Dream duet with Wranx) |
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kiss Of Death (Dream duet with Wranx) If you were to look at him really look you would find a man cut from a cloth somewhat on the bias and decidedly threadbare. But, glance away and you'll see it that glinting glimmer emanating from his eyes the dark shining that is her that is her howling that drives his nails into his palms. He walks head bowed to the weight of what was his hair thrashing the air banging at it like the tongues of hell. Poor fellow: Like a climbing vine she circled him between a town and a hamlet where two streets meet bearing grapes. His arms and legs struggle still within the memory of her twining clasp robed in her promise a repentant wearing a hair shirt he trundles on. The black winds of remorse snatch and pluck at his collar with crone-like hands snapping behind him. The days come and go the sun hisses the moon glares even the weeds wrap around his ankles dragging him down into the folds of his skin unremembered. Poor fellow: But, he remembers her, of the smoky eyes and burning mouth her porcelain heart of feverish needs. How her white face a slow migration of so much talk a conviction hanging triangular like a coat-hanger would smooth the sour hope and the blur of things. How he found within her willow limbs a sinuous swaying of narcotic dream a drowning in which he lost his will. And how it all ended the deed that undid him on that descending day when fate got unlucky and he was taken by shadows. That usher him now up those thirteen rough boards to the thirteen foot dais and the thirteen inch blade of the Halifax Gibbet. To be continued…… [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (07-20-2003 02:19 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
her, of the smoky eyes and burning mouth her porcelain heart of feverish needs. In complete awe, these duets are killing me I'm completely intimidated now lol. I can't think of anything to say other than i adore this through and through. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I knew it would be good, but never expected something THIS PERFECT! I'm so glad you guys wrote together. I knew there was a 'sinq' going on there... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
WOW! This is amazing; and I, too, am in awe. You two make an incredible team, and I can't wait to read what's coming next! Hugs to you both... "it is better to be a part of beauty |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
What an intricate and finely woven write. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed and Maree: What beauty has been set before me . . . a conviction hanging triangular like a coat-hanger heheh . . . brilliant Never would have thought to use that description so the cause of death is indeed a SHE? metaphorically speaking The both of you amaze me and I am so happy that this writing occurred . . . waiting on the continuation . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-20-2003 03:55 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The term "seamless" has been applied lately to duet bondings...I'm proud to think that I could not dissect who wrote what...the mind blendings were wonderful, and I am eager to see Part II! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Angel & Wranx, A field of symbols that flowered. Loved the walk. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thank you friends, for having the patience to read this through. It was taking on a life of its own. Sharon, very happy that you like it. Maree and I kinda like this one too. Don't be too eager for the next. It seems neither one of us do things quickly. Ed [This message has been edited by wranx (07-20-2003 10:00 AM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi poet friends, thank you for stopping by and having a read of what Ed and I came up with.... I can surely say it was so much fun and a great pleasure writing with Ed. Sharon, thank you for bringing us together. Ed, you definately are a dream duet partner, I had a wonderful and fun time writing with you and I can't wait to get started on part 2. Thank you m'friend. Thank you all for your kind and lovely replies. Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed and Maree...A fabulous poem...so well done!! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a great duet one of the best |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Fine wine is worth the wait. My my my... to be continued? Yes indeed. If not, I'll chew the cork. Simply, and yet, not inticately, a beautiful portrait of living loss--you took heartache and painted it man. Poor fellow? M'lord and lady Duchie, I beg you both to fill this empty glass. You made me feel winter, in July, in New ORlEANS, TOO. damn. shaking my head. This is so, so...sigh. THIS IS. I would toss roses, but you'll have to settle for the petals, I do believe I chewed the stem... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Simply awesome! Can't wait for part two! I loved every word of this. Bravo! Chris "At one glance |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
W-O-W!!! Pepper |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this duet much |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Bravo! I think perhaps... the best duet I have ever read.... now...lol.. I wish I had written so much of this... |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Amazing. The title pulled me in and the poem itself is so full of symbolism. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Wow! This was poetry. I can't wait for the next... Susan C. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks again everyone. The replies have been wonderful. Ed "You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next" |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
This is an amazing read ... BRAVO ... to you both. Enjoyed this one and look forward to the next. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"to be continued"--very welcomed words to read!!! Kudos two times over! Warm appreciative hugs to you both!!! Outstanding collaboration!!! EA |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Two of our best and most creative -- Dream Duet indeed! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A wonderful write from two very wonderful people. This certainly was a dream duet. I look forward to the second part. Hugs to you both Ethel |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
You two did a really good job together... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Stunning work! *S* This is indeed a dream duet... please don't make us wait TOO long for the continuation! *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Talk about chemistry in poetry, I think we have the best ellixer there could be here, and can't tell you how impressed I am with this duet. You are certainly meant to write together that is evident. Bravo! |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*jaw drops* after reading this I don't think I even belong here If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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