Open Poetry #27 |
drifting |
Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Sometimes I wonder why, the last thing she asked me was "what is your favorite color?" She laughed, said "black?" she thinks I've gone dark And if only she knew, what I wanted to tell her I picture it sometimes, saying No, it's the color that shines through the windows, in the city at night. The color that signals a warning- NOTICE ME IF YOU DARE The eyes of the cat, during graveyard shift. And the things so far away- that we'd like to touch, but can't. The line that seperates you from me. It says "you misunderstand me" You see the darkness, but I am the light It's the color from the song you hate, and the one you pretend to love. But I only smilled and wispered grey I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
it's the color that shines through the windows, in the city at night. The color that signals a warning- NOTICE ME IF YOU DARE The eyes of the cat, during graveyard shift. And the things so far away- that we'd like to touch, but can't. The line that seperates you from me. ~*~ Grey CAN be that broad and distant. Excellent writing, Liz... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
No Sunshine, it's NOT grey I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You can't have light without darkness, black was first |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wind, you amaze me!! I am putting this in my library! hugs, Chris "Said you'd give me light... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Raph makes and exelent point. But..not that either. the big clue was "the things so far away, that we'd like to touch, but can't" I won't tell you till someone guesses it oh and Chris, sorry, I missed your reply, thanks I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, If you can tell me something worth fighting for -coldplay [This message has been edited by Wind (07-08-2003 09:21 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Oh Liz...very touching write...very deep, nice ending I'm impressed! [This message has been edited by passing shadows (07-09-2003 04:53 AM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
And the things so far away- that we'd like to touch, but can't. The line that seperates you from me. Oh gawd, i like this part the best, it can be applicable to so many things, death, separation, differences in opinion, the unknown....oooh you have such a wonderful mind. you really DO give me shivers Liz. I notice that this smilie was also requested to be made by you, so who better to use it on..youuuu ya crazy peanut. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Yeah, but what's my favorite color? (haha, it'll all make sense when someone gets it) I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
drifting huh...the shift in colors do to the drift of frequency in light reflected tendds to add a layer of meaning to this piece... and a depth tothe words that let one apply the idea..regardless of your favorite color.. to their own life and circumstances. you wrote some very nice lines in this and create some images that are quite impressive in the concise delivery yet vivid conveyance of a picture... very nice work... nice indeed... as for your favorite color.. blue of course... the color fo these pages |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
No, sorry, next question. (thanks for playing) Thanks for replying to I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I am now renaming you from Wind.... to Brat Child... queen of the cheeky... LMAO |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Red... Jason |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"We all live in a..." I can't just give it away I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yellow you brat... LOL |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
no, not red, black, grey, or blue I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Yellow? yeah, thats it, you found it. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you oh queen of the cheeky.... think I'll shorten that to Queen of the Bratty.... LMAO |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
all cat's eyes are yellow, things far away, that we'd like to touch...Um stars, the color that shines through windows at night. This is about my friend, she acts different around other people. Ok, you win. You get a big, yellow smile nono, I'm cheeky. I'm not a brat. If I was a brat, I;d do something like this NEENER NEENER NEENER!!!! I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, If you can tell me something worth fighting for -coldplay [This message has been edited by Wind (07-09-2003 01:50 PM).] |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Black, The color of night So associated with evil deeds To where we take flight When hiding fits our needs. If she had said that to me I would have replied “why yes, till they find a darker color” Gloom |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Wind I absolutely love this.... my fav lines..... The eyes of the cat, during graveyard shift. And the things so far away- that we'd like to touch, but can't. The line that seperates you from me. It says "you misunderstand me" You see the darkness, but I am the light It's the color from the song you hate, and the one you pretend to love. Nice to read you Maree. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I just read how you wrote this, and its amazing. how you stitched everything together, so perfectly and so un forced. yellow submarine...it caaaant be her favourite song really can it? so, your words were totally the opposite of how i interpreted them. i like that, but i like what they meant to me in my world too. so thanks for another day in the life of Liz. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
no...she only pretends to like the beetles so she'll seem like she doesn't care about what people think of her. And the other song: she cant stand that one I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I love the beatles. she must be ok. tell her i love them more. then again, PRETENDING to like the beatles...its a crime. she hates yellow? insanity. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
mabe we're the insane ones. She doesn't hate the color yellow. She hates the song yellow. Or was that what you were saying. I like them both. Any color that ties my two favorite bands together is a good color I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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