Open Poetry #26 |
The Waltz of Time [for those who have lost loved ones] |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The Waltz of Time It came about so quick, and clear Reasons why you wanted me near, For I could waltz the night with you, To violin, or hummed voices, two… Then you said, “Please marry me, We’ll climb the mountains, swim the seas,” I nodded yes, I would not be false, Then we danced the Wedding Waltz…. ~*~ Time was swift, carried into view Seasons’ shift, till naught was new Though one thing sure, in this romance, Each new eve, the Waltz was danced… You aged quite well, and I, of course, Grew graceful wrinkles at gravity’s force, Our hair now sprinkled well with gray, Yet we waltzed with time each day… ~*~ Then one day, some fifty years As memories are now more than clear I danced the Anniversary Waltz with you, It kept so close, this love of two… Now your hand lies cold and chill Though in my heart, humming still, Are strains of the Waltz that we danced, And two lovers, who took a chance… ~*~ Who dared to dance as only lovers do, Who stepped with time, in their Waltz of Two |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
the memory of the waltz will dance you into tomorrows of a cherished past! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Examples abound today of the mighty force of your pen. Did I tell you? I want to be just like you when I grow up! -Patricia |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Reading this with tears in my eyes. lovely thoughts, well penned. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Very nicely done. Enjoyed. When the morning cries and you don't know why... |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
I really liked this even if it was sad I enjoyed reading it Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
-------------------------------------- It came about so quick, and clear Reasons why you wanted me near, For I could waltz the night with you, To violin, or hummed voices, two… Then you said, “Please marry me, We’ll climb the mountains, swim the seas,” I nodded yes, I would not be false, Then we danced the Wedding Waltz…. ----------------------------------------- and this..... -------------------------------------- Who dared to dance as only lovers do, Who stepped with time, in their Waltz of Two ------------------------------------------ Karilea, I feel this, you know. Hugs, Ethel |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Time gives and takes, but I think when a love is danced, it is forever! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A beautiful waltz that will forever dance within a cherished memory. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
and a beautiful dance they danced. Thanks for sharing my sunshinygirl Maree |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Nothing is quite as sweet as a long experienced love nor as sad at the chill of time. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Nothing is as beautiful as to waltz through life with your own true love. This is a keeper Karilea...a treasure for my library. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
needs to be read again |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Lovely... I'm adding this to my library. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am so sincerely, and deeply, affected by your words. My eyes literally misted and I am filled with emotion..... This now has a home in a special place in my inner sanctum sanctorum. Thank you, Karilea. Loving, warm embrace, Linda |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Simply beautiful. Eric |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautiful...touching, awww gosh, very touching...thanx KJ... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*sigh* beautiful, what else can I say? |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Karilea, it is so nice to hear a tribute such as this, of how wonderful, the life long unity of love can be. Thanks for the poem, to be sure. But for actually living such a life, and being a shining example of true love. Well for that, your thanks can be in knowing that your life has exemplified the embodiment of commitment, and of harmonious contentedness. That others too, can look to, for hope in their own aspirations, of marital bliss. An amazing write And Karilea, your picture looks simply wonderful! Thanks Dixie, for bumping this up Take Great Care, Richy |
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Frank Tymon Junior Member
since 2003-05-11
Posts 27California, USA |
When the music comes from the heart, Who needs a band? Frank Tymon |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karilea The tears welled in my eyes as I read your touching words. So very graceful and elegant were your verses. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Beautiful memories of love.... ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* a timeless love that was made for just two...This poem leaves me speechless...I love it's tenderness... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
hey, beautiful verse, Sunshine! I love the way it just flows from beginning to end...very pretty write! sp I want to wake up to the sound of waves |
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