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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-04-17 06:43 AM

Truth.
I don't want to miss you,
But I can't seem to suppress,
The flood of emotions,
That is rushing in.
Overwhelming.
I can't let you see,
What I'm truly longing for-
A scent upon the breeze,
Or a look from you eyes.
Whispering.
All that would simply be,
To much to as for,
Especially after what I've done,
But I will ask for one thing.
Forgiveness.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-04-17 05:41 PM

As always, excellent poem.
I especially love the line, "I can't let you see what Im truly longing for."
Well done.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

ParkerT745
New Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 2
TEXAS

2 posted 2003-04-17 05:44 PM

Very good poem! spoken real.
=) tyler <><

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-17 06:03 PM

I really like this one, Staci. Good write.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

4 posted 2003-04-17 07:52 PM

Good poem Staci...I really liked it.

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

LuckyFelix
Junior Member

since 2003-01-17

Posts 34
Here.

5 posted 2003-04-17 08:17 PM

I liked it, very touching...No.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-04-17 10:13 PM

very, very good. I can relate to it more than I'd like to admit to.
Jenni

You are what you make yourself to be.

StephyBob07
Junior Member

since 2003-04-18

Posts 37
Texas

7 posted 2003-04-18 02:54 PM

i like this poem a lot. it's a clear and beautiful poem. ~stephy

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

8 posted 2003-04-18 06:00 PM

I really really liked this poem!

I think you did very well on writing this poem, the vividness is there. Nice work

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

Jaime

Registered

Member
Posts 250

9 posted 2003-04-18 06:40 PM

Hello there. I remember you. The rest of the people here I don't know, but that's what's nice about this place. There's always new people to impress. (Don't mind me, I'm always this sincere.)

I hope you recieve what you are asking for, and what you're not. As for the poem, I think that you expressed yourself well without overdoing it. Well done.

Jaime

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

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