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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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enter I, into a soft adorning of a slivered winter sky, into a powdered horn of tamp and stamp of wonder why Into a marker: warning-- how dull the silvers dry! singing rounds in swirl chirping birds in twitter-- garland sounding mirrored girl... a lady floating sash echoes of my memories and fingers holding ash Carbon in a changeling a diamond in a crust-- all the things I used to be becoming things I must... crystal made from dust. The finite point of everything-- a gather of my trust. creation in a lather-- cocooning sighs of heaven sing-- all the things I'd rather... |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Serenity Hi there, this is exceptional writing the inspire simply pours from your poem, so well written I really did enjoy this. The rhythm and the rhyme in this are simply stunning. Oh yes I like this I really do. Excellent writing, I’m loving the growth of you I really am.   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity: "A changeling of coal be I-- crystal made from dust. The finite point of everything-- a gather of my trust." Beautiful writing, unique, you. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
sigh...I sure have missed your words my dear!! This is truly lovely.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Into a darker morning-- enter I, into a soft adorning of a slivered winter sky, into a powdered horn of tamp and stamp of wonder why Into a marker: warning-- how dull the silvers dry! =========================== A girl of flash and memory a lady floating sash echoes of my memories and fingers holding ash Carbon in a changeling a diamond in a crust-- all the things I used to be becoming things I must... A changeling of coal be I-- crystal made from dust. The finite point of everything-- a gather of my trust. ==================================== KA????????? DO you KNOW how AWESOME this poem is???? I LOVE THIS!! What a gorgeous poem!! I dont know which impresses me more... the imagery or the internal rhymes...please dont make me pick  ....then there is the phrasing and vocabulary...and most of all the uniqueness of the images...the colors and the clever mastery of the analogies.This is one impressive inspire me twin... forget the vials baby..send me the INSPIRE I NEED a muse like this *wink* (IWIHWT)  |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Serenity~ This poem is just so you...I love to read your words because they are so unique and eye-opening. crystal made from dust. The finite point of everything-- a gather of my trust." There is so much depth in your writing.....you say everything you want to, AND make it rhyme and flow perfectly. Amazing  *hugs* ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
YOU certainly can write |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ME?!?! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Your talent is showing in this one, with a grace seldom seen.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes..I agree with Seymour... completely |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
And all the things that you are, would be. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now, I'm going to save this one. . . the message here is loud and clear. . . and that's as it should be. . . you have only gotten better. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Into a darker morning-- enter I, into a soft adorning of a slivered winter sky, {sigh} =============================== IM BAAAAAAACCCKKKKKK did ya miss me???? hehe just came back to inhale your rhymes divine one more time... "garland sounding mirrored girl... A girl of flash and memory a lady floating sash" yer so kewl kisskiss |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Sometimes I'd rather, too....I loved this!  ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
the rhyme pleased my ear |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whoa! Hey guys...sorry I disappeared on ya like that--I didn't mean to be rude! Thanks for the great feedback on this one, it is just great to feel the keys beneath my fingers again!!! I love ya'll bunches!!!! muah!  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"A smattering of angels wings creation in a lather-- cocooning sighs of heaven sing-- all the things I'd rather... are you..." YAY!!! Oh my gosh, your wonderful words are always so enchanting, sweet friend, this shines with such surreal feeling! (kiss on cheek) It is delight to have you back, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Spectacular -- an archaic word I never thought I'd use, but it deserves to be dusted off for this. |
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