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Ratleader

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0 posted 2003-02-18 07:32 PM

        Bringing You

If poetry could

                bring you

        I would write forever;

     if the words could

span that distance, mine

               would crack atoms

        in their desperation,

    bind the neutrons into

dauntless wires

               and fetch you to me

         at the speed of light.

    But words are

slow and plodding things

               I only say and hope

          a few will touch

    to let you know

that I am where you are

               if only in my thoughts,

          and you with me

     if only in your heart.

So I begin

              and you are here.

Cpat Hair

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1 posted 2003-02-18 07:51 PM

So you begin...

very nice work... enjoyed...

Duncan
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2 posted 2003-02-18 07:52 PM

'    But words are

slow and plodding things

               I only say and hope

          a few will touch

    to let you know

that I am where you are

               if only in my thoughts'

If it's not love, you're doing a really good imitation...

Ratleader

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3 posted 2003-02-18 08:01 PM

I wrote this while walking the grounds of the Big Canyon Golf And Country Club (entry fee, $175,000, yearly dues and greens fees unknown, house not included), dodging a tournament full of the worst women golfers I have seen in my life, taking little notes (most of which appear above), and further endangering my life by being distracted by the wish that she were there to walk it with me....

Alas that I was only doing some work there -- I have not even a score card to show for it.

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Martie

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4 posted 2003-02-18 08:39 PM

hi Ed..Words are slow and plodding? Not so, with the internet and Passions..you have touched me in a nannosecond, and that's fast!

[This message has been edited by Martie (02-18-2003 08:41 PM).]

regards2you
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5 posted 2003-02-18 08:44 PM

I've a feeling you will write forever, regardless. May all your dreams come true.

Enjoyed the sentiment in this.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Sunshine

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6 posted 2003-02-18 09:35 PM

But words are

slow and plodding things

~*~

Sometimes. But when one has their thoughts together, sometimes just sign language will do...

nice read, Ed.

Ratleader

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7 posted 2003-02-18 09:40 PM

You got that right -- I wandered across the fairway at the wrong moment and three of those golfers started waving their clubs at me! Most effective "signs".....

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8 posted 2003-02-18 10:23 PM

Hmmm. Always had a bit of trouble with "words" mesself.
One can only hope that they are understood.

I like this, Ed

Ed

Ratleader

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9 posted 2003-02-18 11:20 PM

Ha-ha! Wranx having trouble with words -- next time that happens, I'm selling tickets!

Seriously, I'm right now in the process of looking up and reading every piece of poetry you've ever posted here. Wasn't going to tell you that, but what the heck....

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Jason Lyle
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10 posted 2003-02-19 01:02 AM

Like all your work,this is good.
Jason

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11 posted 2003-02-19 02:45 AM

wonderful write, I enjoyed

Mysteria

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12 posted 2003-02-19 03:48 AM

Loved the flow of this, and the jokes too

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Ericc
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13 posted 2003-02-19 08:10 AM

Very creative!
Eric

Nan

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14 posted 2003-02-19 08:36 AM

I'm still picturing you running across the green with an array of ladies flailing their drivers in trail... Good write, BTW...

garysgirl

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15 posted 2003-02-19 08:59 AM

(me laughing at you and Nan)
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(you getting out of the lady golfer's way)
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BTW, your poem is absolutely right..

Ethel

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16 posted 2003-02-19 03:55 PM

Hello Ed

Thanks so much for sending me this link and I can see what you mean - we must have been on the same wave length when we wrote our poems. I actually saw the picture and wrote the poem from there. I hope all is well with you.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Ratleader

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17 posted 2003-02-19 04:38 PM

Ratleader gets a smile..... Given the right amount of atmospheric interference, we could have appeared to each other instantly -- "Surprise! Wrong person!"

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