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Don't Tell Anyone
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Don't Tell Anyone |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Don’t Tell Anyone You have never known me, she said, as she put her hands into her tousled mess of hair, like the curled and misplaced jungle where she lived, had lived with this stranger who saw straight lines when what she saw was curve. So, how had they lived through two children and his drugs and her CREATIVE EXPRESSION, for years, when to not make war was like making love without touching, but with the same afterglow. We never fight in front of the children, she said, and then confidentially she told someone they hadn’t made love in six years, but he said he gave her foot massages and touched her delicate there, between the toes where he could not help but yearn for the shoe salesman he used to be in his father’s shoe store looking at the legs and up the dresses of so many friendly feet, before, when he was young. And she wishes to express herself, she is an artist, a creator, cannot live this work ethic, must be free and cannot with children still too sensitive to understand. And the children listen behind the sigh and the rolled eyes of not listening, see her skin recoil from his touch, his steady upturned pain, and they wonder why they cannot say that it would be better not to wait, because right now, really stinks! ____ rewrite from 7-00 |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Martie the pain in the actually screams out. I think this speaks for so many that stay in relationships for whatever reason, be it the children, or fear of leaving, and look for the goodness in all that is lost. So very sad Martie, but a true poem of life. Well done. ~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
So, so true, Marti...and so well written. And in this sex crazed world (country) of ours, I thnk many lose the true meaning/value of love. Their is love after sex, especially if there was love before...and things happen that cause it to go by the wayside. Hystericktomies (I know it's misspelled but I don't care) for instance. People don't realize how that affects the physical drive of some women...it goes away, even with medication. And there are a number of other reasons...but won't carry on. I love your writing Marti...it's such an eye-opener, especially if one will but look. jwesley |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggggsssss) Oh Martie, this is so very sad, I do also think we live in a lecherous world overwhelmed with sexuality and I believe that one should first get to know a person and fall in love with them then when there is a deep attraction in time it is okay to make love but it hurts me to see the ideas harming children ever so much! (sad sigh) This is so sad but powerful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all these victims, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This was sad Martie, and many messages written in here about true love. wonderful.floria Floria |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This tale has a sad familiar ring to it. Sorry to say, I've known a few families whose lives were like this. I've always wondered what kind of 'love' relationships the children will have. Well written, Martie. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, this is remarkable and certainly some of your better writing. I would like to see more like this. Great work, my friend. (((hugs))) Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How many don't tell anyone's have we ever heard from a stranger or a friend, willing to talk of what could be better but instead hear the steady upturned pain.... you write life so very well... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hello my friend, The silence is deafening... and speaks volumes in a relationship. Much courage to stay and try, much courage to leave and live. Beautiful and well done. ThisDiamond |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
This was so realistic, so many true images of a relationship held together for all the right reasons, yet living it feeling so wrong. Thought provoking to say the least... Very well done! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And she wishes to express herself, she is an artist, a creator, cannot live this work ethic, must be free and cannot with children still too sensitive to understand. And the children listen behind the sigh and the rolled eyes of not listening, see her skin recoil from his touch, his steady upturned pain, and they wonder why they cannot say that it would be better not to wait, because right now, really stinks! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ How very very sad Martie. Well done, hugs, Nancy. ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Martie. all I can say is you have touched my heart with the familiarness of this poem. Well said. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Excellent poem, especially the one between the lines. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The mundane days of our lives are all wrapped up tightly into this piece, Martie... We all have them... We just don't express them as only you can do...  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sheesh...this blew me away..you have such a tight way of writing..nice work again, my friend... HUGS  K |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
You tell well, painful truths. Artistry. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Tis is a realistically WOW poem Martie, just magnificent |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
It is sad when compassion is gone from one toward the other....and the harm that it brings to all. I have been down this road, had to almost lose it all to see the reality, to figure out what my problems were...and to try to make it work... The situation you write of can be very difficult...for everyone... You have penned it well, in your usual impeccable style... |
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