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Larry C

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0 posted 2002-02-15 10:21 PM

Shared Heart

.......my half of your heart   my half of heart.......

by larry chadwick   by doreen peri

     the unconditional and cans                    the whethers and nots are
       are tepid sometimes, the future not          hot and cold, the heather of spring
            so easy to tell, as this giddy young boy   coming one day, i'm told, as this silly girl's
          anticipates the possibilities of us and yet   mind remembers how the sun once shined
            dreams the hopes that all lovers dream   the very moment your hand touched mine
        poetry a longing, yet to be shared with   and still i sing on wings of Love, storms
       a beauty of like mind, the echo of his   banished, poetry my gift, as the shifts
            write, the other half of his embrace   of sands between the comes and goes
              unaware of the challenges there   of reminisce echo, and now how still
              oblivious to what he risks, not   my half of heart becomes, pulled
            a doubt that somewhere out   out taut by tide and undertows,
       there the other half of who   wrought with the trying to
         he longs to be, yearning   define the boundaries of
           for a fit that is the gift   a sea, seeing the mere
     that will define all of   half of me so clear
       the boundaries of   like morning has
         his sea, and all   come in a blue
   possibilities of   mist kissed
what life’s ifs   so true
     probably   like ifs
     should   can
          be   be

© copyright larry chadwick © copyright doreen peri

[This message has been edited by Larry C (02-15-2002 10:29 PM).]

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

1 posted 2002-02-15 10:35 PM

Loved your individualism and the way
both sides came together.
kudos to both of you.

Mistletoe Angel

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2 posted 2002-02-15 10:49 PM

YAY!!! OOOOOOHHHHHH...I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, THIS IS BREATHTAKING, I LOVE IT!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) Ooohhhhhhh...your hearts weld together in this marvelous poetic masterpiece, this is soooooooo lovely, kudos to you, BRAVISSIMO!!! (smiles) We all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Larry and Doreen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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ShadowRider
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3 posted 2002-02-15 11:08 PM

What a superior presentation! This is originality expressed at its best,
with a wistful longing for romance.
The love bug bit
and you bit back!

Wonderful job, youse guys!
tSR

Madame Chipmunk
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4 posted 2002-02-15 11:08 PM

Ooh!This is just so very PERFECT!!!!!!!!!!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Ivy Rose
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5 posted 2002-02-15 11:54 PM

CLAPPING LOUDLY!!!!!! Each side of this heart could stand alone in poetic wonder; but the duet makes this poem of the heart SUPERB!!!! ***Ivy Rose

doreen peri
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6 posted 2002-02-16 12:52 PM

Larry... thank you for all your hard work in putting these two together... and for reposting them as one.... it is really cool and i was so very delighted to see you echoing my half of heart..... this is very special and i will treasure it always.....

and thanks to all who have read and replied so generously with compliments.... you're all the greatest!!!!

amusemi
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7 posted 2002-02-16 01:02 AM

Awesome! Just awesome!

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2002-02-16 02:22 AM

Creative and enjoyable to read...James

Larry C

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9 posted 2002-02-16 02:27 AM

dor,
Sorry I couldn't use your graphics design with it...the file is just to big to post. But I still love it. Thank you so much. This meant a lot to me and was such fun!

Everybody,
Wow...thank you so much for your kind words. Some how I am of the understanding that we owe Marge the credit for the format. But you could have guessed that! When I saw dor's poem I felt it required a response. I had no idea how much work it would be, nor how much fun. Thank you.

Hey! I just figured out this was free verse. How could that happen without knowing? Who do I see about this?

[This message has been edited by Larry C (02-16-2002 02:36 AM).]

Midnitesun

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10 posted 2002-02-16 02:49 AM

Wow! I can see left brain, right brain, and left heart right heart both in this one....United and harmonious, beating as one, yet individually. APPLAUSE!!!!

Sunshine

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11 posted 2002-02-16 08:41 AM

What an awesome write! I would hope that the two of you would collaborate some more, and surely, surely! Get this one published! I loved reading both separately, then together, and what an echo! Ah, Bravo! Brava!

Kethry
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12 posted 2002-02-16 08:52 AM

Larry and doreen,
you write like a person divided

. I loved the format and the echoing response. Way cool.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Enchantress
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13 posted 2002-02-16 09:16 AM

Doreen and Larry!
This is amazing! What incredible talent the two of you have! I love this, and I'm keeping it! Thank you so much for these beautiful words from the heart!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me~

walker
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14 posted 2002-02-16 09:26 AM

Love it.

strbbux
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15 posted 2002-02-16 09:58 AM

Oh my gosh Larry and Doreen , this is astounding, who would ever think to do that, and the poem is wonderful, just beautiful. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Startime
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16 posted 2002-02-16 10:03 AM

STANDING OVATION!!!

I love shape poems and this one is absolutely stunning....MAGNIFICENT...I Love it!!! I love it...You two are just amazing...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Victoria

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17 posted 2002-02-16 10:05 AM

I dont know how you two did this..but its amazing..and so creative doreen and larry..hugs

~Vic

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will never betray."
— Confucius

Greeneyes

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18 posted 2002-02-16 10:46 AM

Larry~ Doreen~

I am so glad you reposted this over here.....it is both amazing and such a 'heartfelt' write, excellent from you both!!

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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Balladeer

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19 posted 2002-02-16 10:46 PM

Sorry it took me so long to get here, Larry. This is truly a wonderful piece of work, both in substance and form, and I tip my hat to you, good sir!

Larry C

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20 posted 2002-02-16 10:54 PM

Thank you everyone. There was a tremendous amount of satisfaction in this piece. And a bunch of work. It was worth it and doreen has been so generous in the process. Thank you for all your kind words.

And thanks again to doreen.

doreen peri
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21 posted 2002-02-16 11:56 PM

thank you all for your responses...

i wrote my "half a heart..." piece in #18 and Larry did a really cool job echoing the lines with his own and putting them together into one piece to read...

it was such a cool surprise to me!!

thanks all for reading and for your kind compliments.... i'm glad you enjoyed this!!

and thank you again, Larry, for the wordplay.... it was fun!!

heartfelt wishes to all, hoping all of you had a great valentines day!!

i did!

catalinamoon

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22 posted 2002-02-17 09:03 AM

Wow! Cheers to both of you, beautiful hearts, each.
Sandra

Larry C

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23 posted 2002-02-17 11:23 AM

Sandra,
Thanks...it was fun.

GenXer
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24 posted 2002-02-17 01:00 PM

Larry/Doreen - Great presentation of this very original and well written poem. Kudos to both of you.

Dave

Larry C

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25 posted 2002-02-17 01:13 PM

Dave,
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed.

Martie

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26 posted 2002-02-17 01:51 PM

Doreen and Larry

A wonderful heart meld in this coming together...beautifully done!!

Marge Tindal

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27 posted 2002-02-19 01:41 PM

Doreen & LarryC~

I was gone a bit
but now I am back
So glad I found this
in the back-page stack
Flipping the pages past
for poetry like this
should always last~

BEAUTIFUL job, you two~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Larry C

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28 posted 2002-02-19 07:43 PM

Martie,
Thanks, it was fun!

Marge,
Oh cool! I've been waiting for your opinion...since it seems the heart idea was your. Whew!

Bella
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29 posted 2002-02-19 07:59 PM

I absolutely love this...how absolutely expressive- visually and emotionally...

above everything else, love one another...
life is as fleeting as the wind

Larry C

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30 posted 2002-02-19 11:07 PM

Bella,
Hey...Welcome to Passions. I love this place and hope you do too. Watchout for Sunshine. She is sending you a surprise! Let me know if she fails me...I mean you! And thanks for the compliments.

doreen was great!!!

littlewing
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31 posted 2003-07-15 12:52 PM

Larry - Oh My God - I have NO idea how I missed this the first time around . . .
truly magnificient!
Hope you dont mind I brought it back to breathe
It is beauty . . .
xxoo

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Larry C

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32 posted 2003-07-15 09:40 AM

Littlewing,
Heaven's no, how could I mind. Thank you for taking the time to read this and you r kind words.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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