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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Ok this is kinda...like...different poems but merged to be one.K?Got that? No? Oh, I'm sorry. This is kinda weird. Don't know if I like it.Well...read away. Colic child ever forced to scream. No breath, enough to close her eyes, And thru the creaking steps to croon, To swoon the babe with Angel's cry. Fading larkspur kissed scarlet cheek While soothing monarch drifted by. A cherub, frightened--not to speak; Trapped in Death's own blooming catchfly. Sweet, naked blade, do kiss her plight! For true love's pleasantries: a dream. Have yet to nurture fantasies; The fleas won't cease to feed, it seems. Escape stares, naught for loveless eyes. As passing thru a vanished sleep, Feed faith to demons, wretched flies. Expose her darkness, liars deep. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Hehe, what language is that. Quite interesting lingo  I loved this part:"Fading larkspur kissed scarlet cheek While soothing monarch drifted by. A cherub, frightened--not to speak; Trapped in Death's own blooming catchfly." That was truely amazing JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is a neat compilation of your works from recent times. As a result to how you composed it, the whole thing lacks a certain unity. But unity sucks anyways.  Every line in this was a neat demonstration of your writing talent. It almost seemed like if you were to sell a "Carly" sampler of some sort, this would be perfect. You rule! *high-five* My library needs a Carly sampler! ~Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i think it is a very original piece, i really liked it.  ill reserve any other comment. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
beautiful carly..absolutly breath-taking *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Carly -- and you wonder why I always say that you are very talented  well, it's so obvious  keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was quite confusing for me Carly....me and my petty mind! Care to explain?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow... sorry I'm so late. I'm with dopey( a little confused )... Each line was intriguing by itself and they gave me lots to think about, but in the end I can't put it all together. Very very interesting though... I must say, I really enjoyed this Jason |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hahaha...this was really about nothing. Each line means something. Some stanzas mean something. It was meant to confuse all of you. Hehe..me is evil. Anyways. I'm glad ya'll liked it. Stay cool. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now, why would you do such a thing? no matter what, you're still a very talented writer "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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