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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-06-04 05:02 AM


Come down, my friend, come gently down
And settle on the flower
And place wet beads upon the blade
And moisten draping bower
But do not make a single sound
My love is sleeping still
So fall onto the morning earth
In silence if you will

Reach out, my friend, toward pointed beams
Embrace the rising sun
Consume the warmth assigned each leaf
The day has just begun
Unwrap your flaunting petal wings
Bathe each in perfume balm
But don't allow the fragrance stir
His most exquisite calm

Please let my love rest peacefully
Still draped in midnight’s fold
And do not let your garish beams
Disturb his dreams of gold
So radiate in measure, friend
Shine prisms through the glass
But don’t cast rainbows on his face
Or in his darkness pass

Sing out your morning song, my friend
But trill more quietly
Do not disturb his slumber from
Atop the dogwwod tree
I could not bear that he should wake
By morning bird or mist
Or roses spreading to the light
Or sunbeam's playfulness

For it is I who wants to wake him
With a tender loving kiss

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-05-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-06-04 05:12 AM


profound---beyond my capability of words--

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-06-04 06:58 AM


Sigh.... lovely Elizabeth, just absolutely lovely!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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3 posted 2000-06-04 11:46 AM


Elizabeth, of the morning song~

Stirring ... beauty from your heart.
What gentle thoughts so displayed with ease.
You rock the cradle gently with your verse.
My, my !
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 2000-06-04 11:52 AM


Liz--Wow!!!  Opps, I'm being too noisy, but wow!!  This is gorgeous...I love it!!!  Wow!
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5 posted 2000-06-04 11:59 AM


You certainly painted a vivid picture, lush images, flowing words and a beautiful romantic ending. wonderful poem.

Reach out, my friend, toward pointed beams
Embrace the rising sun
Consume the warmth assigned each fold
The day has just begun
Unwrap your flaunting petals
In sweet fragrance cautiously
Please don't allow their perfume stir
This lulling ecstasy




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Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2000-06-04 06:36 PM


Serenity, Kit, Marge, Martie, brian
Thanks dear friends for reading and for your lovely comments
Martie, it was fun talking today. Denise is so sweet, isn't she?
Love
Liz

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7 posted 2000-06-04 06:45 PM


Liz, you write one more poem this beautiful and I'm gonna throw my pens away and go back to doing easier things, like Rembrandt recreations!!!

Beautiful, beautiful work......

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8 posted 2000-06-04 07:21 PM


Well, I know that I told you this morning in person that this was absolutely one of the most beautiful poems that I had ever seen, but I wanted to post it here as well! This is one of my favorites! Thanks again for a lovely day!  

Denise

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9 posted 2000-06-04 08:06 PM


Oh my...what a lovely poem.
Sigh...if only I could pen something of such beauty...you leave me in awe...  

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10 posted 2000-06-04 08:09 PM


This is so magical, like love can sometimes be.  I loved this.  Thanks for sharing.
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11 posted 2000-06-04 11:08 PM


This is simply beautiful Elizabeth!

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 2000-06-05 05:05 AM


Balladeer,
Don't you ever throw your pens away, I depend on them too much for my inspitation.
And besides, poet pens don't come cheap, esspecially those with muses included.
(The muse plumes)
Then, of course, there's your work part time as meter man. But, you know, a Rembrandt would be nice too. My suggestion, just stick tp your exquiste poetry
Liz

Denise, Thank you for coming and spending time with me. Thank you for your support and for your help. The saga didn't end when you left. I will e-mail you. You brightened my day
Liz

Maree
Whatever you penned from your heart is the most beautiful poem in the world to you and two your loved ones, the most important readers
Liz

Jana,
And poetry is as magical as love
Thank you
Liz

Eagle one.
Thank you so much for reading and respondind
Liz

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13 posted 2000-06-05 07:19 AM


Oh Elizabeth, I'm left speechless and in Awe, this had me captured from the word go, absolutely beautiful *sighhhh*  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



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14 posted 2000-06-05 07:40 AM


this belongs in a gallery of fine poetry.< !signature-->

 "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways.
I love thee to the depth and breadth and height
My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight
For the ends of Being and ideal Grace" Elizabeth Barrett Browning


[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 06-05-2000).]

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2000-06-05 07:43 AM


The Bumble Bee has landed .......
Landed on the flower, heard you whisper this poem, his heart gave up, decided to be silent lest he unwittingly wakes up your blessed love who would rather be awakened by ...

Well, the bumble bee decided enough was enough and left the flower after chewing on the pollen grains and searching for honey, but the love he saw as an image from the words that he heard, made him realise there is something that is sweeter than the honey that he collected...

Though saddened at his discovery that what he had collected was not the sweetest thing, but then he had just discovered love, he flew to his love and there was a garden in full bloom....


Liz, this is beautiful poetry from you as always, but this one is one of the very special ones , and a brilliant gift to me after coming back from the heavenly sea side of Venice... Thanks for giving me the courage to catch up on my work and the pleasure of continuing with the discovery of more poems posted in the last few days...

Regards, sudhir




 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 2000-06-05 07:51 AM


Dark Angel
Your very warm words are music to my morning calm
Liz

Irish rose,
For it to remain in the gallery of your heart
is my grandest achievement

Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 2000-06-05 08:01 AM


Just leave it to Sudhir to read a poem and on the whim of imagination, create a little bee with aesthetic tastes, who after days of hard labor, would abandon his most treasured fruits of labor for the sake of love. And then be so inspired as to create a magnificent flower garde.
Sudhir, I believe you have just created the makings for a new ballad. And I would like to deicate this poem to the little bee.
I hope you are well, and please send my regards to"you know who"
LIz

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18 posted 2000-06-05 10:00 AM


*speaking very quietly here* I think this is definitely one of my favorites of yours, Elizabeth!

Elizabeth


 And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why?



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19 posted 2000-06-05 10:02 AM


no kidding....I ditto all of the above, my heart just catches in my throat, this is incredible
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20 posted 2000-06-05 11:09 AM


AWESOME!!!

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21 posted 2000-06-05 11:26 AM


Liz

this is really a extremely competent job .. fresh imagery and fresh ideas ....

you are quite a poet y'know

Philip

Elizabeth Santos
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22 posted 2000-06-05 03:01 PM


Elizabeth , Corazon, Passing Shadows
Thank you for such wonderful comments

Poertree, Thanks, my friend, for your remarks.It means a lot

Liz

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23 posted 2000-06-05 03:56 PM


This is incredibly lovely...
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24 posted 2000-06-05 04:04 PM


Liz - you are one incredible talent - this is terrific - I gotta tell Lorelei about this poem - I wonder if she already thinks this way - she always wakes me with her sweet kisses
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25 posted 2000-06-05 04:16 PM


Oh Liz...I am absolutely melting with this one and so glad I stopped in to say hi today....absolutely beautiful my friend  
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26 posted 2000-06-05 06:00 PM


Remarkable, truly, beautifully, remarkable...

and now, my quill, to rest...

for I am not, nor am I able

to compete with this, the best...

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Elizabeth Santos
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27 posted 2000-06-05 06:50 PM


Suthern and Longjohn,
You truly honor me with your readings
Thank you both

Hoot, so happt to see you. I edited this on since you read it, improved some of the lines
Thank you, enjoy yourself and don't forget us. Denise was ove to my house yesterday. If you come to this area, please stop and see me


Elizabeth Santos
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28 posted 2000-06-05 06:54 PM


sunshine, your comment was so beautiful, but please don,t ever putdown your pen
thank you dear
liz

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29 posted 2000-06-05 07:16 PM


OOOOO's and Ahhhhh's were heard and then a hush fell over the breathless audience...and then the deafening ROAR of the crowd..... I Loved every word...they floated like angel wings across the sky.  You are a Queen of Weave!! Thank you so much for sharing this.

Elizabeth Santos
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30 posted 2000-06-05 08:07 PM


Come hither, little butterfly
And light on petal's wing
With sails of gold now open full
to life's most precious things
Rise swiftly up in flutterings
With powdery wing in pose
But tumble and twist in silence please
My darling's eyes are closed

Thaank you so much, butterfly
Love
Liz

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31 posted 2000-11-29 08:01 PM


Just beautiful...I had to read it again...you have my deepest sympathy.


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32 posted 2001-02-13 08:32 PM


As I do not believe this is in my library it will be added as of today.
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