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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Ok guys there is a simple little story that goes with this little poem here. It was a reply to a poem written by Kit McCallum in the open poetry forum,either eight or nine, I'm not sure right now, called Ode to A Teenager. This poem especially touched me and so I wrote a poem in return as a response. You guys should really check it out. Unless Kit would want to re-post it in here, hint hint, hint. But anyway, here it goes. You remind me of the relationship between my mother and I. For you see it was alone she raised me from knee high. I grew up a young man to be with dreams circling about my heart. And every time life was crushing them she was the sealing part. I think back now on the times I cried, because I was hurt. And now that I am a big strong young man Its my mother that I hurt. She is still the one I turn to when life gets out of hand She takes me from the violent waters to set apon dry land. I'll never forget the times we've spent lamenting oe'r the past For the future thats ahead of us, is sure to everlast. thanx; jason  P.S. Kit I did give this to my mother and she cried. Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
That poem was so sweet! Your mother is one lucky woman to have a poet like you!  ~*~SCG~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Jason, Didn't know you had it in you. Beautiful poem. Very personal for you, I can tell. If you want to talk to someone about stuff, you know where I live. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Awwww that was just so sweet Jason...This was beautiful too!!!Keep up the good work...  ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
What you did was very sweet with your mother. I like the idea that a son can openly go up to his mom and give her a poem he wrote about her. Make me think the world is a alright place. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Much applause and clapping here Jason! Oh, I'm so glad you found it. I saw your response (to my response the other day), and went searching, but couldn't locate it ... as I wasn't sure which poem of mine it was in. I loved this poem then ... and I love it even more now. I'm so glad you shared this with your mom ... they are our greatest treasures and deserve to be told once in a while in such a beautiful way. I'm ecstatic! You've made my day Jason!!! I'll take a copy of that poem and post it here, in case anyone is interested too. Thanks for the wonderful idea. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
very good and I really enjoyed this poem. keep up the great work and hope to read more. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
What a wonderul tribute to your mom Jason! So there is some love in that heart of yours hehe! You Know I love ya kid. And I know your mommers does too, because any mom who received that would cry! Keep it up my dear!! < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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kutzly Junior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 17ohio |
I LOVED YOUR POEM IT WAS GREAT it touched that one spot peace me |
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kutzly Junior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 17ohio |
I LOVED YOUR POEM IT WAS GREAT it touched that one spot peace me "when there was only 2 sets of footprints it was when i carried u my son" Footprints |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Jason, this is a beautiful tribute to your mother. You are very lucky to have a mother like that, and she's lucky to have a son like you. Thank you for sharing this with us! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is so nice, great writing from the heart here man |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Way t'go Jac! This poem is fantastic. You really know how to write an emotional piece. I commend you, you rock!! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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