Open Poetry #6 |
When Warriors Weep |
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
When Warriors Weep ~*Marge Tindal*~ Brave young warrior where have you gone Into the hills to mourn your song The breaking heart knows no ache like that of the warrior when it breaks The raging waters know not how deep the tears of the warrior when he weeps From umber hills the plaintive yell the heart of the warrior breaking all to hell Come now the spirits to calm from within the tears of the warrior for his lost friend At end of day the tears have ebbed the tear-spent warrior none left to shed On morning's light quietly he comes to bury the hatred that was done He carries the dead within his heart warriors weep when loved ones part His jaw now set in stern reprove when warriors weep the world is moved ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
So am I Marge....moved by this. Very beautiful ! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh Marge, just like this poem moved me, my friend...just like that... This is a striking piece of writing, Marge. Thank you. ~ Claire |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
wonderfull..I am wondering what brought this poem to your mind. If you wanna share the history of this one. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Munda~ Thank you for your appreciation. It moved me to write it. Claire~ Just knowing it moved you is enough for me. You pay me great honor with your reply. Thank you. CompGirl~ Thank you for finding it wonderful. Let's see ..... how do I say it just came from a spirit that cried out to me tonight. From the legends of my Cherokee heritage I have learned to be quiet and listen. The pen moves of it's own accord. Believe me ... I'm as surprised as I can be when I look upon the page and see the words. Heck, it's all I can do to keep up with typing as fast as the thoughts come. I hope that helps explain it. Thank you for asking. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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warrior Junior Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 11 |
WONDERFUL ~~MARGE~~WORDS TO REMEMBER..........WARRIORS PAST AND PRESENT |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
My ~Warrior~ Of all who would understand ... I can always count on you. Perhaps your cry is what I heard? Love you ~*Maiden*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
This is a powerfull and beutifull poem you have shared with us; kind of reminds me of Achilles crying for Patrochlus. It also reminded me of an ancient Aztec legend, One that narrates the story of the warrior Popocatepetl and his prematurely departed love Iztlazihuatl. Keep that voice and that pen flowing you do it well... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ixtab~ You pay me a wonderful compliment. I am honored with your comparisons. I am familiar with the story of the Aztec legend of which you speak. ~*Marge*~ 'Popocatepetl, whose name means smoking mountain in the Nahuatl (Aztec) language, was an Aztec warrior who was in love with Iztaccihuatl (meaning white woman). The myth about these two volcanoes lying between Mexico City and Puebla is very similar to that of Romeo and Juliet. While Popocatepetl was away, the Aztec princess, Iztaccihuatl, was mistakenly informed that Popocatepetl had been killed. Deciding that she could not live without her love, she killed herself. When Popocatepetl returned and found her dead, he was overcome with grief. He built a mound and laid her body on it, and vowed that he would never leave her again. Those who have visited Mexico and seen these two volcanoes will notice in Iztaccihuatl the shape of a woman, lying on her back and covered with a white sheet of snow. At her feet stands Popocatepetl, eternally watching over her.' ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Marge(y) - this is wonderful!! I have the story you relate in a book of mine - coupled with exquisite pictures - it moves me to tears every time I read it. I would send you the illustrations if I had a scanner... This truly is a great poem - with life and spirit - just like you really. K 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ I swear I was just thinking of you. Honest injun ! LOL ! Glad you enjoyed this poem. I've quite an assortment of pictures of the volcano of the story. I'm always touched by any stories of the legends of the Aztec. They are truly amazing to study. Hope all is well in your corner of the world. Love you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
I completely agree with you, there are many beautifull and intriguing Aztec legends, they range from everyday life to trascendental kind of knwoledge. About those volcanes, they are trully awesome, unfortunatelly, instead of sticking my head out the window and take a glance at them, i also have to relly on pictures or memory to conceive them, the obscene quantity of smog in this city leaves no other choice -sigh-. I also agree with severn, you are full of spirit and life... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I will study them a little on my Anthro course I think this year. I am so full of desire to know all about past cultures - I wish I could time travel my friend... Miss ya K |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
What a remarkable poem from as I've seen...a remarkable woman. Your talent amazes me and your words touch me....thank you. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ixtab~ Thank you again for the read. The smog is a problem for sure in viewing such beauty. Enjoyed your information. Kamla~ Ahhhh! We 'travel time' in the history and legends written and shared. Aren't we fortunate to get to read and see what has gone before. But .. I understand the desire to wald the past, as I have it too. ButterfliesDC~ Thank you. This piece also warmed me anew this morning ... and I am pleased to have touched you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Marge, what an wonderful insight into your heritage, and into the makings of Marge! Your comments were as interesting as your poem, too! Corinne |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I must commend you on the power of this poem, marge. I wasn't sure what compelled you to write this, but the image left to me was overwhelming. Being of native American heritage, I envisioned clearly my one of my forefathers with stern demeanor carrying their dead away from a losing battle. Tearful emotion surged within me upon reading this...I wrote you a poetic responce to best show how this poem moved in me. Thank you so much, Marge, for this wonderful, inspiring piece. Michael |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You carry the warrior's spirit within your heart Marge--I can hear it in this poem. |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Amsolutely beautiful. This is truley wonderful, Marge. And the picture is great, too. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so touching, Marge! Very well done, my dear! Denise |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Dear Marge, I enjoyed this poem immensly Marge. It creates such a sharp vision...beautifully written. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ I greatly feel the heritage that flows through me. I'm glad you for liking it. Michael~ All I know is that last night I heard a ~warrior~ cry ... I'm sure the meaning will come clear to me in time. Thank you for your stirring poetic response ... it is wonderful ... and perhaps the cry of the ~warrior~ touched many of us. Martie~ Oh, I do that they touch me ... I'm so glad it shows. Thank you for letting me know. Denise~ My heart welcomes your response. PoeMinister~ I appreciate your response very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Written with such power and force.....done with the style of your own and it echos so true. Amazed by this Marge There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David~ It pleases me to know that you find it so appealing. I value your opinion and am smiling ... Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Marge...you never cease to amaze me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mom? Next time, HUG me before you do that.. oh wow, oh wow, how wise...not applauding here--am wearing bells and dancing with a rattle...(some Comanche here, more Mohawk, and a whole lot of Irish inbetween...) |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marge, when you write fresh and fluffy things, you are terrific....but when you roll up your sleeves and get serious, you're awesome!!! I would be your matching volcano any day. Boy, some poetry could come from that!! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Just awesome!, I love it. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot~ I hope that's something I continue to do. Serenity~ Always a *HUG* ! Thank you, little Injun gal ! Cherokee, French, Irish and English here ! Balladeer~ Erupting into gales of laugher here ! Thanks, fella. EagleOne~ I appreciate it. ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 03-11-2000).] |
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