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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2000-03-09 11:17 PM


When Warriors Weep
~*Marge Tindal*~

Brave young warrior
where have you gone
Into the hills
to mourn your song

The breaking heart
knows no ache
like that of the warrior
when it breaks

The raging waters
know not how deep
the tears of the warrior
when he weeps

From umber hills
the plaintive yell
the heart of the warrior
breaking all to hell

Come now the spirits
to calm from within
the tears of the warrior
for his lost friend

At end of day
the tears have ebbed
the tear-spent warrior
none left to shed

On morning's light
quietly he comes
to bury the hatred
that was done

He carries the dead
within his heart
warriors weep
when loved ones part

His jaw now set
in stern reprove
when warriors weep
the world is moved





 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Munda
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1 posted 2000-03-09 11:31 PM


So am I Marge....moved by this. Very beautiful !
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 2000-03-09 11:33 PM


Oh Marge, just like this poem moved me, my friend...just like that...

This is a striking piece of writing, Marge.
Thank you.
~ Claire

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3 posted 2000-03-09 11:37 PM


wonderfull..I am wondering what brought this poem to your mind. If you wanna share the history of this one.  
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4 posted 2000-03-10 12:02 PM


Munda~
Thank you for your appreciation.
It moved me to write it.

Claire~
Just knowing it moved you
is enough for me.  
You pay me great honor with your reply.
Thank you.

CompGirl~
Thank you for finding it wonderful.

Let's see ..... how do I say
it just came from a spirit
that cried out to me tonight.

From the legends of my Cherokee heritage
I have learned to be quiet and listen.
The pen moves of it's own accord.

Believe me ... I'm as surprised as I can
be when I look upon the page and see the
words.  Heck, it's all I can do to keep
up with typing as fast as the thoughts come.

I hope that helps explain it.  
Thank you for asking.
~*Marge*~




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5 posted 2000-03-10 12:16 PM


WONDERFUL ~~MARGE~~WORDS TO REMEMBER..........WARRIORS PAST AND PRESENT
Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2000-03-10 12:23 PM


My ~Warrior~
Of all who would understand ...
I can always count on you.

Perhaps your cry is what I heard?
Love you
~*Maiden*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Ixtab
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7 posted 2000-03-10 12:26 PM


This is a powerfull and beutifull poem you have shared with us; kind of reminds me of Achilles crying for Patrochlus. It also reminded me of an ancient Aztec legend, One that narrates the story of the warrior Popocatepetl and his prematurely departed love Iztlazihuatl.
Keep that voice and that pen flowing you do it well...


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8 posted 2000-03-10 12:45 PM


Ixtab~

You pay me a wonderful compliment.
I am honored with your comparisons.
I am familiar with the story of the
Aztec legend of which you speak.
~*Marge*~

'Popocatepetl, whose name means smoking mountain in the Nahuatl (Aztec) language, was an Aztec warrior who was in love with Iztaccihuatl (meaning white woman).

The myth about these two volcanoes lying between Mexico City and Puebla is very similar to that of Romeo and Juliet.

While Popocatepetl was away, the Aztec princess, Iztaccihuatl, was mistakenly informed that Popocatepetl had been killed.

Deciding that she could not live without her love, she killed herself. When Popocatepetl returned and found her dead, he was overcome with grief. He built a mound and laid her body on it, and vowed that he would never leave her again.

Those who have visited Mexico and seen these two volcanoes will notice in Iztaccihuatl the shape of a woman, lying on her back and covered with a white sheet of snow. At her feet stands Popocatepetl, eternally watching over her.'




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9 posted 2000-03-10 01:10 AM


Marge(y) - this is wonderful!!

I have the story you relate in a book of mine - coupled with exquisite pictures - it moves me to tears every time I read it. I would send you the illustrations if I had a scanner...

This truly is a great poem - with life and spirit - just like you really.

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

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Kamla~
I swear I was just thinking of you.
Honest injun !  LOL !

Glad you enjoyed this poem.

I've quite an assortment of pictures
of the volcano of the story.
I'm always touched by any stories of
the legends of the Aztec.  They are
truly amazing to study.

Hope all is well in your corner of the world.
Love you ~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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11 posted 2000-03-10 01:41 AM


I completely agree with you, there are  many beautifull and intriguing Aztec legends, they range from everyday life to trascendental kind of knwoledge. About those volcanes, they are trully awesome, unfortunatelly, instead of sticking my head out the window and take a glance at them, i also have to relly on pictures or memory to conceive them, the obscene quantity of smog in this city leaves no other choice -sigh-.
I also agree with severn, you are full of spirit and life...

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12 posted 2000-03-10 03:42 AM


I will study them a little on my Anthro course I think this year. I am so full of desire to know all about past cultures - I wish I could time travel my friend...



Miss ya

K

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13 posted 2000-03-10 06:23 AM


What a remarkable poem from as I've seen...a remarkable woman.  Your talent amazes me and your words touch me....thank you.
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14 posted 2000-03-10 07:19 AM


Ixtab~
Thank you again for the read.
The smog is a problem for sure
in viewing such beauty.
Enjoyed your information.

Kamla~
Ahhhh!  We 'travel time' in the
history and legends written and shared.
Aren't we fortunate to get to read
and see what has gone before.
But .. I understand the desire to wald
the past, as I have it too.

ButterfliesDC~
Thank you.  This piece also warmed me
anew this morning ... and I am pleased
to have touched you.
~*Marge*~





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15 posted 2000-03-10 07:26 AM


Marge,

what an wonderful insight into your heritage, and into the makings of Marge!

Your comments were as interesting as your poem, too!

Corinne

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16 posted 2000-03-10 12:36 PM


I must commend you on the power of this poem, marge.  I wasn't sure what compelled you to write this, but the image left to me was overwhelming.  Being of native American heritage, I envisioned clearly my one of my forefathers with stern demeanor carrying their dead away from a losing battle.  Tearful emotion surged within me upon reading this...I wrote you a poetic responce to best show how this poem moved in me.  Thank you so much, Marge, for this wonderful, inspiring piece.


Michael

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17 posted 2000-03-10 01:53 PM


You carry the warrior's spirit within your heart Marge--I can hear it in this poem.  
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18 posted 2000-03-10 02:09 PM


Amsolutely beautiful. This is truley wonderful, Marge. And the picture is great, too.
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19 posted 2000-03-10 02:12 PM


This is so touching, Marge! Very well done, my dear!  

Denise

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20 posted 2000-03-10 02:28 PM


Dear Marge,

I enjoyed this poem immensly Marge.  It creates such a sharp vision...beautifully written.

Poeminister

 "...no single sound too rude
Upon thy slumber shall intrude,
Our thoughts, our souls- O God above!
In every deed shall mingle, love."
--Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade)



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21 posted 2000-03-10 03:11 PM


Corinne~
I greatly feel the heritage that flows through me.  I'm glad you for liking it.

Michael~
All I know is that last night I heard a ~warrior~ cry ... I'm sure the meaning will come clear to me in time.
Thank you for your stirring poetic response ... it is wonderful ... and perhaps the cry of the ~warrior~ touched many of us.

Martie~
Oh, I do that they touch me ... I'm so glad it shows.  Thank you for letting me know.

Denise~
My heart welcomes your response.

PoeMinister~
I appreciate your response very much.
~*Marge*~



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22 posted 2000-03-10 05:21 PM


Written with such power and force.....done with the style of your own and it echos so true.  Amazed by this Marge

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23 posted 2000-03-10 07:14 PM


David~
It pleases me to know that you find it
so appealing.  I value your opinion and
am smiling ...  
Thank you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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24 posted 2000-03-10 10:04 PM


Marge...you never cease to amaze me  
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25 posted 2000-03-10 10:25 PM


Mom?  Next time, HUG me before you do that..

oh wow, oh wow, how wise...not applauding here--am wearing bells and dancing with a rattle...(some Comanche here, more Mohawk,
and a whole lot of Irish inbetween...)

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26 posted 2000-03-10 10:53 PM


Marge, when you write fresh and fluffy things, you are terrific....but when you roll up your sleeves and get serious, you're awesome!!! I would be your matching volcano any day. Boy, some poetry could come from that!!
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27 posted 2000-03-11 03:27 AM


Just awesome!, I love it.
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28 posted 2000-03-11 04:10 AM


Hoot~
I hope that's something I continue to do.

Serenity~
Always a *HUG* !
Thank you, little Injun gal !
Cherokee, French, Irish and English here !

Balladeer~
Erupting into gales of laugher here !
Thanks, fella.

EagleOne~
I appreciate it.
~*Marge*~
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 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com           



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