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I’ve yet to fall into the eyes that touch (sonnet)
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Hi everyone, sorry I haven't been able to reply to many of you. I havent posted in over a week either. I've been busy writing sonnets for the Poetry Workshop. Below is my attempt at a Spenserian sonnet. If you're interested in writing sonnets, take a look in the Poetry Workshop forum. ----- I’ve yet to fall into the eyes that touch The depths within her blessed mortal being, Yet yearn to feel her softness, in as much To kiss the lips from voice of angels sing. I’ve often had the need to feel the thing Or hold, the hand that God’s own hand did make, For, only her—creations perfect being, Could ever give to me what others take; A heart of which mine will no longer break, And chance of one in million this occurs. For love of which I cannot explicate, I’d sell my soul to reach inside of hers. For, even though, we haven’t ever met, A love like this, I’d surely not regret. ______ ~Gene |
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Kitty_Fett Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 35 |
A beautiful piece of poetry, u_gene. I hope that I'll be seing more stuff like this pretty soon!   |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
A wonderful Spenserian sonnet Gene. good thing you mentioned the 'being' otherwise I would have 'mis-read' it.  Ok my friend, you inspired me, but I kept it English....I guess I need to practice a bit more. In love I’ve fallen many times and yet I never found a love to call my own For even when two kindred spirits met Life’s circumstances left me stand alone. I often wonder what would be the key And ask myself what makes true love survive The keys are love, respect and honesty Without them love can really never thrive. To share a love divine and feel as one To lose oneself in feelings from the heart And yet remain yourself inside someone Of such a love I’d like to be a part. To ever find true love would surely be The greatest miracle on earth to me. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
u-gene, very beautiful! I don't really know much about sonnets, but this sure seemed perfect to me. and munda, the sentiments and your poem were wonderful! |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
I too don't know much about sonnets but I know when something is beautiful to me and, this one is!! ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is great!! So is Munda's inspired reply!! Wow, two for the price of one!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Gene! Love and sonnets seem to go hand in hand, don't they? Yours is beautiful, too, Munda! Sonnets are my favorite form, I do believe!  Denise |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Oh Gene! You take all my words...I'm speechless!!! All I can say is BRAVO!!! ~~Jamie |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Kitty -- Thanks, I've written about 15 sonnets so far. I'll be posting more. Munda -- Thanks, I like yours too! BTW, Munda is refering to the fact that I chose to make the word, "being" sound like one syllable, "bean" so that it works with the meter. Most people slur the word. For example, the phase "human being" often sounds like human bean. Martie -- Kim -- Thanks so much. You can always join the sonnet class. I think Nan has few seats left. Lizzie -- Thank you, you're in the class aren't you? Denise -- The meter and format of the sonnet seems to lend itself perfectly for romantic writing. I often imagine I'm a poet of old like Shakespeare when writting them. Jamie -- I'm speechless. Thanks. ----- ~Gene |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I forgot to mention that you have certainly come a long way with your writing since you first began writing in January. Seems to me that you have tapped into a natural talent that had lain dormant all your life. Your writing is excellent! Denise |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Thanks, Denise. I really appreciate that.  ~Gene |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Well Gene I must admit to being a bit lazy in the Sonnet department. In fact they are a bit daunting to me. I can't seem to feel them yer know. But I like this one Jon [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 05-09-2000).] |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Gene and Munda ...Romanticism is beautiful when penned like this. Really enjoyed them both Jack |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I really liked this.. And I'm on my way to send it as a card to someone. Beautiful. Munda, I really enjoyed your response to it, too..  I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
John -- Jack -- Angel -- Thanks for your nice comments. I'm glad you liked the sonnet. Again, thank you everyone, I'm sorry I haven't been more active in the Pub lately, but things have really been hectic at work and writing sonnets has drained me. I just need a little break. ~Gene |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Gene, Everything you ever write turns your pen to gold This is another one! Kim |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Kim -- Thanks, that's very sweet of you to say that. But ARGH, I'm suffering from the worst case of writer's block that I've ever had and trying to participate in the Pub right now seems like a daunting challenge. I'm in the dumps and don't know if I can climb out. ~Gene |
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