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Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA

0 posted 1999-07-29 12:21 PM


Yea! Daddy's home for the rest of the day and night
Can we go outside while there's still sunlight?
And daddy lets go down the street for a little walk
When we get to that tree we'll stop for a talk

Can you tell me a secret about clouds and rain?
And what makes it fly, that thing called a plane?
Hey! What is that music? That jingley sound?
Can I have ice cream when the truck comes around?

I got new rocks for my collection, one white - one red
Can I sleep with these tonight when I go to bed?
Here's a flower for mom; here's one for you too
Look, I can do a summersault: how about you?

Here kitty-kitty. Can I have a cat?
When I get older I want one just like that
I'll race you back to the house! I won! I won!
I sure do like running fast; wasn't that fun?

You know what daddy; you know what I think?
I love you a lot; I think you're great!
Thanks for the walk little one, I love you too
How I do enjoy coming home to a daughter like you

© Copyright 1999 Andrew Scott - All Rights Reserved
blueloon
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 161
NY
1 posted 1999-07-29 12:36 PM


Isn't it wonderful to marvel at the innocent gifts of a child? I hope that one day she will be able to read what you have wrote...she is a lucky little girl.
blueloon

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To give yourself keeps yourself still,
And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill.
-shakespeare
And so of you, beauteous and lovely youth,
When that shall vade, by verse distills your truth.
-shakespeare

elvira
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since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
California
2 posted 1999-07-29 12:40 PM


*sigh*...can i borrow some of those lovely childhood memories from your daughters?

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...Music to my Ears...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...a little girl...the mistress...stolen hours...Perfection...07-20-69...insomnia
...devotion...Master...apart...plain...chat?



Balladeer
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3 posted 1999-07-29 12:48 PM


Andrew, I'm available for adoption.
poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
4 posted 1999-07-29 12:52 PM


I'm available too ! Who said anything about adoption ? ; ) Very nice piece - kids starve for quality time with their parents...I think this is a beautiful example....if we could only devote the whole day to them....I think our kids would grow up to be better people....keep up the good work!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
5 posted 1999-07-29 01:15 PM


well, Andrew - there goes my inspiration for writing a poem about a mean Daddy. Yep - right out the ol' window. I hope you're proud of yourself... killing my ambition like that!

I loved your poem. It does bring forth a ton of regret about all the missed opportunities I've had.

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
6 posted 1999-07-29 01:18 PM


Andy...yanno?.....I couldda written that same damn poem!....Almost word for word! I've experienced that with my daughter...like I said...almost "word for word!"....great work mate!
suthern
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7 posted 1999-07-29 01:21 PM


Great poem! And what wonderful memories you're making for the both of you!
Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
8 posted 1999-07-29 01:52 PM


Thank you one and all! Your responses are the icing on the cake.
Blueloon: She'll get to hear it tonight on our walk around the block.
Lady E: I'll post as many as I can. Good to hear from you.
Sir Balladeer: I think you're beyond the age limit for a tax deduction, but I welcome you to the family any time.
PoetFemmeFatale: I'm lucky to be in a position that allows my wife to stay home and raise our childer. She has the hardest job in the world, but it pays in spades.
LngJhnAg: Glad I could be of assistance
Regrets we all got, its what you do with the here and the now that matters.
Toerag: Beat ya to it! Glad you liked. Enjoy em while their young and think you can do no wrong.
Suthern: Just following in the footsteps of my own childhood. Thanks to mom and dad.

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 07-29-99).]

guiltborn
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since 1999-07-26
Posts 30
South Dakota
9 posted 1999-07-29 02:29 PM


if more people would realize the magic of parenthood and childhood and focus on that instead of money and success, i believe that this world we love in would be that much brighter. keep up the great work

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"What dreams may come?"

Guiltborn



Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
10 posted 1999-07-29 07:15 PM


guiltborn: Thanks for your words and the truth they contain.
Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
11 posted 1999-07-29 11:58 PM


Children are our most precious commodity.
Their innocence creates a love unbreakable.
Their enthusiasm energizes family,
and friends.
Their smiles create a mirrored reflection
Their cuddles are to bask in forever.

I loved this, Your family is blessed.
With your kindness you could have a dozen,
and you'd still be smiling.

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 07-30-99).]

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 07-30-99).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
12 posted 1999-07-30 11:06 AM


I think that's a lucky child
Andrew Scott
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Redlands,CA,USA
13 posted 1999-07-30 03:56 PM


Lost Dreamer: TWELVE! Did you say TWELVE! I refuse to be outnumbered parent to child. Self preservation is high on my list. As it is, it's three to one, male to female; and that's not including the girl hamster. I like it just the way it is, thank you very much. TWELVE! Ahhhhhhhh.....
Thanks for the kind words Dreamer.

Lady Hoot: I think we're both pretty lucky. Thanks for stopping by.

grandiloquent
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since 1999-07-08
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Midwest America
14 posted 1999-07-30 04:15 PM


A lovely reminder of afternoons with my dad. I hope that later on, when she's able, your daughter can pay back the praise, Andrew. You seem to be so very deserving.
Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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Redlands,CA,USA
15 posted 1999-07-30 04:27 PM


Thanks grand-one. I get pay backs every day with a hug and a kiss.
Cobra
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16 posted 1999-07-30 04:42 PM


Wow, the beauty and cuteness of this poem is indescribible. Lovely writing Andrew!

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Cammie

aziza
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17 posted 2007-06-02 02:54 AM


This made me smile and I liked it.

A

Artic Wind
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18 posted 2007-11-12 08:54 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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