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Crisp Around the Edges
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Crisp Around the Edges |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Crisp around the edges almost beautiful like fried eggs in bacon grease poached sea turtles and winter grass Strangled by the current's ember the hose leans into the brittle claim of leaves blown about in air of nip-tuck cameras shutter as they flutter Fire eats the forest ants and snaps the smallest thing alive 'til trees are bones and sky is smoke as branches put on flaming coats Hold still the sky has come unglued the wind is in me not just the air when my hair falls in curtains across the aching and I turn away just not today |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, whenever I see a newscast of the devastation that the fires are wreaking in California, I have thought of you and some of our other pipsters. I hope none of your are in the paths of the infernos. I could feel your words ~ and the pain inherent in them.  Linda |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww, this is sad. I hope you are in a safe place. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm in a safe place...not to worry...my son is about 5 miles away from the inferno in Orange County, Lake Arrowhead where I honeymooned and Green Valley Lake, my favorite place to fish, are not so lucky. There is smoke everywhere. Thanks for your thoughts. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
powerful and (obviously) timely 'write!' [a fine 'impressionistic' synopsis of a very sad reality...via 'global warming,' these kinds of circumstances will only ultimately increase in frequency and devastative intensity; etc.] serious applause! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Nice to see you sis... and I'm glad to hear your in a safer neck of the woods. lucky Dale |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sometimes, the quiet pain is the most intense. Hugs |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Good to know you are safe, dear Martie. How intense your poetic description of this deplorable event! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie...Tender write. I offer tender prayers of hope to all those affected by these fires. You know I love California and can't help but feel helpless in this situation...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Perfectly Poetic as always.  I have been worried about you. I am glad to see that you are OK! Be safe my friend. Don't worry about me; I am just as perc-y as can be.  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
horrible fire !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! but strong words descriptive words ARCTIC WIND |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Martie, so glad you are doing ok out there. One of my friends daughter lives in that area, they have left once and come back...so far, safe... Prayers to all out there, and thanking the Lord that our lil flower gal is safe...hugs. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That's how I am here today -- crispy eyes and black soot boogers.....and hot-hot, but the sun looks like a pumpkin in the sky. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
great poem. very good. (im a new member here, and i if anyone has the chance pls read my poem. its under the topic title a poem of love and loss |
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Xillus_Xavier Member
since 2007-10-05
Posts 72Alabama |
What's going on there is terrible. Great poem though. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Hold still the sky has come unglued" a slow deep ache here Martie |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh Martie, I am so concerned about you and all my family/friends in CA! I hope things will settle down, and the Santa Ana winds will cease for this fall...though I know they tend to kick up around Halloween, making the coastline warm, and all the woooded areas a virtual tinderbox. Keep that hose handy, and masks to filter the air. My thoughts are with all of you, in my birth state! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I can't even imagine the loss you are all feeling down there, and I am glad it is finally under some control. Stay safe, and make sure you have good masks to combat the air pollution Martie. You wrote the pain of California well - too well. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Martie ... you can make me speechless sometimes. A wonderful write ... truly. I love what you do to words.  Best wishes and big hugs, /Kit |
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Verg Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 52Colorado |
i'm just a teen and all i have to say is wow that was put together so perfect. |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
great poem. amazingly put together. i would appreciate it to hear some thoughts on my new poems " resurrected" and "shadow" which are both currently in the teen potry forum. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Martie I really feel for you dear lady and wish you a safe haven from those devastating fires. Here in Australia we suffer terrible bush fires as well, although perhaps not as bad as you are suffering this year. Good luck. Lindsay |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful poem.. I will have good thoughts for your safety Marty... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ The fires have been too, too close to loved ones for comfort~ My sister said she cried and the tears left trails in the soot on her face~ I pray it ends soon ... so many are suffering tremendous losses~ Love you Sis~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dear One, it is wonderful to know that you are well, safe and not breathing tooooo much of the smoke....All of it is a tragedy, such a painful scene. Thankful that there have not been too many casualties.... Hugs Party Marti..... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
been watching the news...hoping those fires will subside soon~~~ glad to know you are ok~~ M |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Never one to forget a home state... all I can see in this poem is the heartbreak through flame-choked skies... well done, indeed, Sissie. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Dear Martie - Heartbreak words for a heartbreak situation. So glad you are alright and thank you for a truly wonderful poem. Hugs ~ Helen |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Martie, I don't know you can manage such a touching write in the face of such sorrow. Lots of cyber hugs from Georgia. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Amazing poem, Martie, and demonstrative of your superb ability to express your vision and heart. Hope you and your son are okay. *hugs*.....jo |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Your poetry is great - really serious fire season so far - been thinking about you and Taylor! Paul |
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