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solamente en toledo españa |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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toledo is a walled city how correct that seems for keeping in salida del sol sunrise Tajo is a silent river jade to silver curled in on itself reflecting back we listen to its stillness a witching noise you say escuche listen put your head here sueño ahora dream now déme tú mano give me your hand I cannot dream alone pero the river is ocupado busy looking for you and I am solamente una vez más alone once again not even a thread from your shirt to remind me de tú cara o tú olor of your face or your smell porqué why can the wall not hold you porqué [This message has been edited by The Lady (10-08-2006 03:05 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kate, I love the mixture of language in this one. I am in awe of your many talents. *hugs*....jo |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
I do detect a love for Spain That lies within your new refrain Such lovely words and so unfeigned Keep writing and I'll read again  "The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
jo thank you very much hugs to you sueños dulces sweet dreams... thank you Tris I promise this I'll write of Spain if you read again shoot... I wish I could rhyme |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Ah, Lady, nor rhyme can I and will not til the day I die Words I have to offer are but this hit those lines with a rhythm stick! After this pointless post I will desist I am sorry but I just could not resist. I really do like this a lot, just to add a little purpose to this! "The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun." One God by The Beautiful South |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadyKate~ Absolutely GORGEOUS !! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No reason to rhyme when you paint words so very well. And where did you find that skein of ache? You weave it with skill. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't know why I still cringe when I see these of yours, I know they are going to be awesome!! I guess it's the high school memory of failure in that language LOL |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
The imagery is absolutely amazing. Your use of singular phrasing echoed by spanish is outstanding. Instead of detracting from the quality, it adds a succulent flavor to the entire work. (I always wanted to use the word "succulent" in a reply and I did! And it fit!) The poem is enchanting and mesmerizing. I repeat what I have said before, you NEED to do a compilation of your work. Sandra |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
love your rhymes Tris you make me smile… Marge I appreciate your reply as always… thank you so much Karilea you see me well that skein of ache lies in my heart… I don’t mean to make you cringe Dixie I try to make it easy unlike Senor Becker… sonrisa smile... thank you Sandra! I love your reply and your “succulent” it’s a ripe word come back again and bring succulent with you…  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Oh how the silent river speaks through the stillness....your words carry it's melody into our hearts sweet Lady friend..I can hear her ache, her song.... Nicely done Kate.. quietly whispering, Bravo... seek the flame within yourself |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
whispering back... thank you so much gentle Donna for hearing |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone, you lowride my chevy lincoln with your jump up on the window raza..enjoyed it ms |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I like your chevy lincoln Stranger… like your shirt too let me see it a minute is that a thread? |
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