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Open Poetry #39

Longing for Ghosts

Refugee
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since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

0 posted 2006-10-06 12:14 PM

My lover is a ghost in my mind
Oh how I yearn to touch
Sending wishes across time and space
For the ache is becoming too much

Soft kisses from her breath
Brush my lips in parted pose
Out to the dreamless night
My thoughts of her goes

My loneliness is measured in miles
Sundered from her presence
Skin screams for salvation
Which pays my penance

Burning with desire to melt
In the heat of her whisper
A caress of a soul’s energy
We share in the transfer

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2006-10-06 01:17 PM

The lover in the mind...how illusive...the ache, apparent. I could feel this.

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

2 posted 2006-10-06 02:40 PM

I loved this Refugee. Excellent all round but that third verse is now stuck in my head, curse you!

I keep muttering it. lol

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2006-10-06 06:57 PM

Hauntingly beautiful.
The entwine of spirits, thoughts sipped long into the night.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2006-10-06 10:39 PM

A thoughtful wow...if your critique button were open, I would slide in a few comments because of the wonderful verse that seemed to lack a beat or two...

but what the heck do I know...

I write free verse.

Well done, Sir.

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