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That Spark
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That Spark |
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banished_fairy Junior Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 31Happy in H*ll, PA |
I felt that Spark again. A bolt of lightning, a surge of heat. An instant connection I cannot deny. This has happened before. 3 times in my life. Each time it was spontaneous, Electric, explosive. 3 different men, 3 different reactions The first denied the Spark – Only to admit years later that it had hit him too. Oh, he took advantage of me and my link to him. The second was afraid of the Spark. He also enjoyed what I so freely offered. Yet he ran when the time came to give his heart. The last man was brave. He took the challenge of the Spark. He tried to give as much as he took. Together we worked hard to keep the Spark alive. But sometimes the brightest flame fades out. Now again – I felt it. Powerful, Magical Alive and Unforgiving Deep within my soul. I did not want to feel it. I was not ready for this. And for the first time ever… I FEAR IT. The Spark does not follow your schedule. It does whatever it wants, whenever it wants It has sucked me in. I cannot fight it. The big question is WILL HE? |
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MukkaKukka Member
since 2006-09-18
Posts 88Finland |
I don`t know.. I wouldn`t call it a spark, more like a soft hum, if it is the same thing that we are talking about and then about the poem itself, the structure, or rather, well... lets see, take the ending: Here it is the question whether the I of the poem can fight "it and whether he will, this seems to clash in an undesirable way, but here again its a question of the motives and the fact that the actors become objectives, I dont know, to a certain extent they should intertwine and mirror each other but, the a I got lost myself here... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I don't know if I could handle that many Sparks...  Welcome...you are now banished to pip just kidding M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions! I very much enjoyed your entrance post. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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banished_fairy Junior Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 31Happy in H*ll, PA |
MukkaKukka, Thank you for the thoughts and critique. As to confusing you at the end, why do you think I wrote the poem? Seriously though, confusion was and still is my state of mind. But I admit the stucture could have used alot of work. Mental note for the next one. banished_fairy |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
somewhat like the rush of water from a waterfall into a gorge thousands of feet below.... Yes, I understand the fear....because there are always disappointments, no matter what we do... |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
If he is smart, he will give in to the heat. Great poem! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. What you may want to improve for the next poem, was certainly forgiven in the intensity and flow of this one. Well done. TD |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
welcome Amy you're off to a good start keep going... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
enjoying sparks, vicariously ignition depends upon both the intensity and the availability of combustibles  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welcome to Passions! nicely written first post...I'll be watching for more! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!!  I am glad you found us. Please check your e-mails for a special greeting You may burn my flag... only after you wrap yourself in it first. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Thank you everyone sooo much. I appreciate all the comments and encouragement. I need all the COURAGE I can get. A special thanks to a very special friend who has "sin"spired me to write again. MC - you sure know how to make me smile!!! |
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