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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I’m sitting, seconds traipse by my feeble mind, a mind awash In the brine of a day when thoughts stumble and fall, when A next move is like a pawn’s move….1 or 2 forward, nothing Back….But, I have it backwards…. I cannot remember my next move, I thought of it, had it there Upon my tongue and suddenly it slips away…awash in that Bitter brine… Frustrating, not knowing my next move because my mind does Not remember what it was or should be until suddenly, without Warning….no notice given…..nor quarter…and it is there, the Water’s salt puckering the tongue and lips…Ah, but to have The sweetness of a cherry with a light bit of tart added. Nights bring out the stars…shimmering high above, sprinkling Starlight upon us….wishing upon a moon… The chill of an Evening among the cacti and mesquite…the dance of a bat Chasing an unseen insect….the howl of a coyote….all so Apparent but fading… Yes, fading….just as the memories of those we have loved…. Lying beneath the earth….awaiting the joining of hands… For he shall remember thee if thee remember him…if the Mind doesn’t fade too rapidly...too soon. [This message has been edited by Magnus (09-26-2006 07:42 PM).] |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
brilliant and so poignant Barry... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Lets hope for the best. Good write |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Barry, at one point I thought you were ~ oh, oh, I forgot what I was going to say! ~ Now I remember, I thought you were going through menopause! Not to make light of your post, it truly was touchingly poignant.  Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@EA's response! A most excellent write Barry.. ...um..yes, it is Barry right? I'd know you anywhere.  Hopefully we can maintain our memories for a very long time. Hugs #? going out your way, Nancy. ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx all, it has been frustrating to a degree....think of something...turn around and stand there, looking and feeling stupid..and then, a minute or two later, presto, everything is ok... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You know, sometimes I read a poem and just sit and savor each word. I simply slip between the lines and am part of it. Thank you for allowing me to do this with your poem. Alison |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Barry, there were so many visions that popped into my head while reading through this... I like it when a poem makes me see things with my eyes open  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Barry, This is exquisite! I sense such sensitivity purity of thought. Can you tell this is an all-time favorite? Written like lazy river, so ever gently. I do hope your health has not inspired this. If so, my thoughts are with you. miscellanea |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Clicked; placing on the shelf... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Barry... "For he shall remember thee if thee remember him…if the Mind doesn’t fade too rapidly...too soon." smiling a "knowing" smile... M |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, I also understand this completely. You wrote my thoughts, at times. It kinda worries me sometimes. LOL Huggles, Ethel  |
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banished_fairy Junior Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 31Happy in H*ll, PA |
An excellent poem worth reading over and over again. At first I was lost, confused as the author then ...."presto". Everything came into focus. The words sent me exactly where you wanted me and that is a hard thing to accomplish. SO BRAVO!!! |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
This strikes a chord Barry. Well done!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hi Scorpio, you have been missed.... thanx for the comments. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 .....*hugs*....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I cannot remember my next move, I thought of it, had it there Upon my tongue and suddenly it slips away…awash in that Bitter brine… Been there, done that, bought the t-shirt... forgot where I put it. *S* Welcome to senior moments, my friend. *S* Just don't lose your pen! *S* |
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