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Open Poetry #39

In The Deep of the Night

Refugee
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

0 posted 2006-09-26 12:27 PM

In the deep of the night
The caress of darkness across your skin
Is a fresh breath from within
And chases away the cruel light

Whispers of words just for you
Freeze the senses shared
Leaves the mind impaired
This, the night meant for two

Refuge from the cares of today
Sanctuary of touch and taste
The last dark hours not to waste
Keeps us here in this place

Every moment is a gift given
Enchanted time nocturnal bliss
Never want anything more than this
In the deep of the night, living

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

1 posted 2006-09-26 12:55 PM

This really caught my eye. I love the feeling in it! (Gave me little chills) Very good!

Refugee
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

2 posted 2006-09-26 12:59 PM

And I thank you for that eye being caught.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2006-09-26 12:59 PM

A smile, brimming to be said.
Well done.
TD

Refugee
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

4 posted 2006-09-26 01:04 PM

A smile to this part-time poet, full-time refugee you bring.
Thanks.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-09-26 04:39 PM

another beauty

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2006-10-03 10:26 AM

Every moment is a gift given

That's when you know it's real... *S* Beautiful write! *S*

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2006-10-03 10:32 AM

Well, keep smiling
because the soft senses
that can be felt within
are a very nice touch.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2006-10-04 07:24 PM

Nice...James

sewasham
Senior Member

since 2006-09-11

Posts 714
Oklahoma, USA

9 posted 2006-10-04 10:39 PM

Very nice. I liked the rhyme scheme you used. The meter was good and the imagery was excellent. You should be very proud of this piece. Take care and Have fun. Steve

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

10 posted 2006-10-04 11:29 PM

Excellent poem..I really liked it a lot..
I could learn some things..

good work(and thank you!).

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