Open Poetry #39 |
sunset in the desert |
The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
she leans against ocher painted hill settles heavy skirts about her takes the shade of blue parasol for she must wait till the sun slides behind the mountains her gaze falls into tear rivulets where the light hides slow moments sun fingers the sides of mountains whispers watch I have done it before do you doubt me now? she shudders sun explodes onto rock painting the mauve of his kiss covered eyelids lilac shadow of his hands royal saffron of his kingly name and the true red of his rock heart colors climb the mountains dawdling in crevices peeking about rocks tormenting her heart is still waiting swiftly the sun gathers his colors and sweeps them skyward night is sudden a fast falling of dark she closes the parasol sees no more |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You painted the picture so well, I felt as though I were there...nicely done. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Breathtakingly beautiful! Exquisite as always... your writing is pure magic. Hugs~Nancy ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Barry thank you for your kind reply Nancy thank you so much! hugs to you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Love the use of the parasol....love the poem, Lady......jo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you jo... Kate |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sun explodes onto rock painting the mauve of his kiss covered eyelids lilac shadow of his hands royal saffron of his kingly name and the true red of his rock heart ~*~ some sharp imagery here, Kate. Very nice! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone..enjoyed this view through your eyes |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, me to, this was delightful wishing the story to continue |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I can see it all unfolding before my third eye! Spectacular visuals, Dear Word Artist! Loving hug, EA |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
this was to be your dawn poem Karilea but it spoke without my permission thank you... Stranger there was a tiny lizard hiding in the tear rivulets said you sent him thank you... me too LeeJ thank you and you have a spectacular third eye dear angel |
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anwaarhassan Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 181Menifee, CA |
I agree with Earthangel....very vivid and discriptive...excellent write !! |
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