Open Poetry #39 |
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The Rose Unfolds |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
The Rose Unfolds I want to sing to you a rose And smell the fragrance of your smile While you sip on nectars of love and prose As I toast in laughter to spring’s beguile Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever Beyond which distant suns and forgiven sins bleed Bringing to truth this song from the cold So I can steal your heart from content once feigned Until you believe in my words as happiness unfolds... Marcel |
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BloodyEclipse Junior Member
since 2006-09-07
Posts 16 |
I don't think "I" can help you become better... You have skills. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A breathtaking rendering here Keith. The flow of this one was magical... "Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever Beyond which distant suns and forgiven sins bleed" But this...this was just WOW! TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
delightful tones, speaking volumns... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I believe! Please sing to me! ![]() I've been missing your poems of love! Good to see you back. Hope you stay awhile this time!!! ![]() Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beauty! I've missed reading you Keith |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Again |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
I enjoyed the read, my favorite: "Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers" |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Beautiful! Got to agree with TD's comment! |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Keith~ There is such overwhelming beauty in your thoughts~ 'As I toast in laughter to spring’s beguile Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever' BIG SIGHS~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You are quite good at this...excellent writings. |
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