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exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2007-01-04 11:23 PM

if we'd hidden a bit better
we would have disappeered
into miles and miles of sheets
an ocean of us......

I love you
isn't meant for prime time
it's meant to come
with crisscrossed legs
familiarity
sleep knocking at the door
deep down
insides tied by string
pulling and weaving
a deep pit
meant for butterflies
and sparks
green grass
and secret kisses

I love you
is always on the breath
on laughs
sudden red cheeks
flushed and full
glowing
with the butterflies
wings flapping
keeping the sparks burning
glowing
embers meant for life
embers meant to live on

I'll always be warm

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2007-01-04 11:46 PM

"I love you
is always on the breath
on laughs
sudden red cheeks
flushed and full
glowing
with the butterflies
wings flapping
keeping the sparks burning
glowing
embers meant for life
embers meant to live on

I'll always be warm"

A beautiful write.
The closing verse a WOW!

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

2 posted 2007-01-05 01:37 AM

This is an interesting poem. It is full of excited diction: burrerflies, sparks, laughs, kisses. Yet it begins with that sighing word "if." Thanks for posting it.

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latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

3 posted 2007-01-05 03:01 AM

This is a lovely love poem. Truly enjoyed it. Thank you, late.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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