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Open Poetry #39

I feel not well

themute
Member

since 2006-05-08

Posts 469
Maryland

0 posted 2006-12-26 09:58 PM

I feel like shiatsu, the sounds of spit.
The hour’s slow; my ego grows
To sooth myself (I lose myself)
Without a glance of hesitation.

Oh dear god, my savior odd.
I try to love, my heart above
Without one thought, my all for naught
From the painful-sting, disdain.

Simple is’t no’, that she will go
To make a prayer, beginning layer
The broken stair; with blackened hair
Where the nighttime never leaves you.

The climax: their obvious glair.
She looks with eyes, without surprise.
I look with hands; my eyes are sans
And my heart is broken to her.

[This message has been edited by themute (12-27-2006 12:11 AM).]

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

1 posted 2006-12-26 10:18 PM

Matthew,

Your poetry is stunning! It has a voice of its own that sings loudly and clearly. As to "I feel not well", I hope the new year brings good things.

miscellanea

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2006-12-27 05:46 AM

I agree... he writes stunning words that capture and lure you in !

well done Matthew you gorgeous boy! RDB

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-12-27 07:18 AM

stunning....gorgeous....
yes, I agree!

themute
Member

since 2006-05-08

Posts 469
Maryland

4 posted 2006-12-27 10:30 AM

Ladies, thank you for your warm coments. they are comforting, though my situation is rather depressing. it sturrs my butterflies and makes me sad and feeling hopeless. love is a sad thing when it doesn't go both ways.

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