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twinkyfl1
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0 posted 2006-12-18 05:48 AM



The snow is falling from the sky
Its flakes defined and clear
So too, the tears escape my eye
Because you aren't here.

You seem to me so far away
If only I could reach you
And make you stay another day
I'd like so much to teach you.

To say the things you cannot say
To show the hurt inside you
To breach the walls so cold and grey
That hinder you and hide you,

From showing some emotion
And sharing it with me
Your pain is like an ocean
dividing you and me.

You need to reach inside you
And bring them to the open
I'll be right here beside you
And I'm praying as I'm hoping.

That our love will still be there
A remnant of our past
That we can choose, ourselves to share
And finally make love last.

To thy own self be true

© Copyright 2006 junemarie roldan - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2006-12-18 06:00 AM


understanding the meaning behind this one...nice rhythm and rhyme

M

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2006-12-18 06:29 AM


very nice write... you are a talented writer and I so enjoy your work... RDB
twinkyfl1
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3 posted 2006-12-18 06:59 AM


nakdthoughts, It's comforting to know that you understand. Thank you.
twinkyfl1
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4 posted 2006-12-18 07:01 AM


Roniece,

I think we have a mutual admiration society going on here. Thanks so much.

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2006-12-18 07:32 AM


very touching...beautiful write June
twinkyfl1
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6 posted 2006-12-18 08:25 AM


Thanks so much Dixie. It means a lot to me, that you think it's beautiful.
trutodaraiders
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7 posted 2006-12-18 01:37 PM


Nice opening on this poem; flowed nice. Overall I thought you did a great job. I think you should go back and read some of my eariler poems I posted here. We have striking similarites.
twinkyfl1
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8 posted 2006-12-18 04:11 PM


trutodaraiders,

I promise that I will. By the way you can call me June. Thanks for your kind comment.

ThisDiamond
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9 posted 2006-12-19 09:19 AM


Lyrical the sentiments placed here.
Well done.
TD


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Deep in the heart
10 posted 2006-12-19 02:03 PM


1derful sentiments

twinkyfl1
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11 posted 2006-12-19 03:09 PM


Thank you very much, Diamond and Interloper.
Startime55
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12 posted 2006-12-19 03:23 PM


Beautiful words softly express and filled with longing....you put it perfectly for I remember the feelings well....**BIG HUGS**

twinkyfl1
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13 posted 2006-12-19 03:54 PM


I don't know how you feel about bear hugs, but here's one for you. Thank you.
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