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twinkyfl1
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since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

0 posted 2006-12-18 05:48 AM

The snow is falling from the sky
Its flakes defined and clear
So too, the tears escape my eye
Because you aren't here.

You seem to me so far away
If only I could reach you
And make you stay another day
I'd like so much to teach you.

To say the things you cannot say
To show the hurt inside you
To breach the walls so cold and grey
That hinder you and hide you,

From showing some emotion
And sharing it with me
Your pain is like an ocean
dividing you and me.

You need to reach inside you
And bring them to the open
I'll be right here beside you
And I'm praying as I'm hoping.

That our love will still be there
A remnant of our past
That we can choose, ourselves to share
And finally make love last.

To thy own self be true

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2006-12-18 06:00 AM

understanding the meaning behind this one...nice rhythm and rhyme

M

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2006-12-18 06:29 AM

very nice write... you are a talented writer and I so enjoy your work... RDB

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

3 posted 2006-12-18 06:59 AM

nakdthoughts, It's comforting to know that you understand. Thank you.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

4 posted 2006-12-18 07:01 AM

Roniece,

I think we have a mutual admiration society going on here. Thanks so much.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-12-18 07:32 AM

very touching...beautiful write June

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

6 posted 2006-12-18 08:25 AM

Thanks so much Dixie. It means a lot to me, that you think it's beautiful.

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

7 posted 2006-12-18 01:37 PM

Nice opening on this poem; flowed nice. Overall I thought you did a great job. I think you should go back and read some of my eariler poems I posted here. We have striking similarites.

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

8 posted 2006-12-18 04:11 PM

trutodaraiders,

I promise that I will. By the way you can call me June. Thanks for your kind comment.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

9 posted 2006-12-19 09:19 AM

Lyrical the sentiments placed here.
Well done.
TD

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2006-12-19 02:03 PM

1derful sentiments

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

11 posted 2006-12-19 03:09 PM

Thank you very much, Diamond and Interloper.

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

12 posted 2006-12-19 03:23 PM

Beautiful words softly express and filled with longing....you put it perfectly for I remember the feelings well....**BIG HUGS**

twinkyfl1
Member

since 2006-12-15

Posts 133
florida

13 posted 2006-12-19 03:54 PM

I don't know how you feel about bear hugs, but here's one for you. Thank you.

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