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spiked4
Junior Member

since 2006-12-07

Posts 35
Hammond, La

0 posted 2006-12-11 11:50 PM

I watched you lay there
Cheek to Cheek
Mother daughter in silent peace
so gentle ang glowing
with beauty and pride
My heart so filled
to lay at your side
for there is no time
No moment so true
As this very moment
I stay here with you
You are the gleam
In my babies eyes
you are the stitch
of which we comprise
That no more happy
can I ever be
Than watching you here
each second you see
Time passes before us
so soon she'll be grown
Running and playing
In search of her own
Life and Love
Peace and joy
together her life
We'll share and adore
Our Sweet Makaylah

Draugluin
Junior Member

since 2006-12-08

Posts 48
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2006-12-11 11:55 PM

Very touching tribute to youth and life. I especially liked the bit: "you are the stitch of which we comprise" and how it's right in the center of the work "stiching" it's two halves together. Not sure if that was intended but interesting to me, noless.

spiked4
Junior Member

since 2006-12-07

Posts 35
Hammond, La

2 posted 2006-12-12 12:00 PM

It's where the line fell as I wrote
interesting though Not that well thought out
Thank you Draugluin

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2006-12-12 10:01 AM

A heartfelt write

I loved it.

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

spiked4
Junior Member

since 2006-12-07

Posts 35
Hammond, La

4 posted 2006-12-12 10:34 PM

much appreciated Interloper

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2006-12-13 09:42 PM

This is such an endearing portrait of calm after the storm--it brings me great joy to know that you have found "serenity" afterall...

May you always have the happiness that you deserve my sweet friend.

Sweet Makaylah has such a good daddy.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

6 posted 2006-12-14 03:53 AM

ah I nearly missed this - what a wonderful write for your wife and daughter! very much enjoyed .... RDB

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2006-12-14 01:23 PM

This is tender and warm. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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