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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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If I could just touch your ankle, he whispers, there on the outside, above the bone ~Rita Dove what if I’d said no don’t touch there or there either ‘cause it’s most too hard to shake that feelin’ of rime that forms at the edges that icy who are you feelin’ makes questions spark fires the mind with hot what if I’d said no don’t touch there it burns leaves tiny red marks on the brown I ain’t fixin’ to let you mark me done that before never did turn out right what if I’d said no don’t touch there it hurts have mercy with god’s own glory I swear it hurts not now no but someday it hurts I can feel it [This message has been edited by The Lady (12-05-2006 11:51 PM).] |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
nice Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~sigh~ what if, indeed, you said no to the burn? to rejecting a passion's FEEL... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kate, this somehow reminds me...moth to flame.... slow burn in your words here Lady....can feel it, yet somehow see the Phoenix rising... hugs you... |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Kate... this is a good write - enjoyed RDB |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you Bill Janis sang get it while you can don’t you turn your back on love Kacy… never say no to the burn right? gentle Donna this is 199% moth to the flame and Phoenix rising too you read me so well hugs you back thank you Roniece |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Slow the burn of moth to flame smoldering ash swirls clutching chest phoenix rising breathing, breathing deeply breath fills lungs with fresh air scented in the hope of a new dawn. ~~~~~~  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady....To not be touched hurts worse. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone, ah just a little touch..trust me, I'm a doctor...occasionaly..enjoyed this ms |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For those days, you need more than an aspirin.  |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
We have to dare to take the plunge. Great job. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
what if you said no would I continue or stop what does your heart say does it tell you to submit do your eyes betray your lips Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
that icy who are you feelin’ makes questions spark fires the mind with hot I have been here to recently....I really like this one.... kingsangel |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I think i agree with Martie....it always hurts so much when not touched...but the poem is still brilliant..thank you.... Goldenrose. At the touch of love, everyone becomes poets. Plato 427 BC-348. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ahhh gentle Donna I think I need to talk to you hugs Martie you are so right… Stranger darlin’ I know you’re a doctor I’ve seen your stethoscope kewl what do you think those little red marks are chigger bites? thank you for your consultation Karilea you’re so right aspirin just causes more heartburn thank you Steve ahhh Interloper you peeked at my eyes thank you nice place to be isn’t it Angel? thank you thank you Goldenrose |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I liked this very much. Have you ever heard of Merrit Malloy? She was a favorite poet of mine in the 70's. This reminds me of her writing. Very powerful and emotional. Sandra |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I like that you put the quote there. Very good writing. Most won't beleive me but I really wish I could write stuff like this. Cheers - Ed And I said to the devil, "You better leave my spleen alone." |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Sandra somehow Merrit Malloy slipped past me but I’m on her trail now and will read her thank you for your reply ah Ed you are so hard hitting so strong why would you want to change your style? thank you |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I love what ifs, so you can see how this title grabbed me. Without what ifs, would Edison have ever...???? Like Edison and in his developing of the light bulb, how many failures and risks before great success? Love, too, can be full of risks I suppose, but probably a lot more fun and heart wrenching! Enjoyed your poetry, misc |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kate, Now you've gone and congered up a lovely memory. The first time, ever, I touched my wife we sat at a dining table visiting with a mutual friend. She had her foot on the rung of my chair and I dropped my hand and held her ankle. It burned us both without regret. Lovely write. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you misc I think love is probably a lot more fun than developing a light bulb but failure in either can be so frustrating oh Larry what a lovely story thank you for sharing your burn without regret |
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FNG Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477 |
new skin forms where we were once burnt...a good thing too. FNG |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
so true FNG thank you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And just how did I miss this touching piece?! WOW!! In the midst of winter, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I'm so pleased that interloper brought this poem to my attention! I can see why your poem was a source of inspiration to him!  Linda |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Nancy thank you so much Linda Angel |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
I know the feeling...when you want to scream "ANYWHERE BUT THERE"!!!! I di dit again replying twice to the same post. Hmmmm ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
it's ok angel thank you again |
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