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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2006-12-03 12:49 PM

The air speaks, you know, in a manner quite unknown
like the trees when they stand judgmentally upright
and it tells me, glory be, that two ends are coming in
and joining in a circle around everlasting love.

First the tears for beauty’s there - moving, moving, moving,
and then the sigh that inculcates dreams and fantasies
into the deepest, strangest, need that goes beyond desire
in a woman reconciled to the ways of mortal life.

And the reach to believe there is truth in the feel
stretches and enlarges the boundaries of a mind
until energy unleashed seeks a similar release
for there is beauty there - moving, moving, moving.

‘tis a wandering minstrel, lover, that plays this deepest need
and entwines the strings of mind around a mystery
until death’s dark shadow bares his fangs
and snaps the cord tied flesh to soul!

Helen / 3 December 2006

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2006-12-03 02:32 PM

"until death’s dark shadow bares his fangs
and snaps the cord tied flesh to soul!"

~ powerful ending! (& very creative!)

with love,
Linda

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2006-12-03 03:23 PM

Thanks, Linda. Perhaps creativity is a way of staying sane - helps me!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-12-03 03:52 PM

Helen, this was outstanding, and worded so magically yet, so honestly and precise in rhyme.

this...

into the deepest, strangest, need that goes beyond desire
in a woman reconciled to the ways of mortal life.

And the reach to believe there is truth in the feel
stretches and enlarges the boundaries of a mind
until energy unleashed seeks a similar release
for there is beauty there - moving, moving, moving.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2006-12-03 05:03 PM

I agree with LeeJ this is outstanding!

Be well
Roniece

MsSouthernOrchid
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 192

5 posted 2006-12-04 12:11 PM

I'd love to be able to write this good. Great poem! There are some very talented poets in this forum and you are one of them.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2006-12-04 03:18 AM

Thank you so much LeeJ, Roniece, and MsSO! I think I just tell about things as they are or were and if it turns out to be "outstanding" then it's because the "event" is or was of such a quality.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

7 posted 2006-12-04 03:30 PM

Helen

you're so modest
but your talent is great

if I had chosen a favorite line
I would have chosen them all...

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2006-12-04 04:25 PM

A wonderful write.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

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