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Nightshade

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0 posted 2006-11-30 02:16 PM

raindrops
matching my tears
stream from panes of sad eyes
bathing the sweet soul of nature
streaking my hearts framed window with regret
while the earth drinks with disregard
of a love lost to time
and so I cry
raindrops

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Chris Barker
Novemeber 2006
~~~**~~~

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27

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1 posted 2006-11-30 02:26 PM

it's as if raindrops were falling on your soul from the very hand of God...
I read that somewhere...can't remember who wrote it but that is what came to mind when I read this!! I like it!!! take care!!

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

2 posted 2006-11-30 02:58 PM

You better not cry or I'll have to do serious bodily damage to someone!
Gr8 write, Chris

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Nightshade

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3 posted 2006-11-30 03:18 PM

Thankyou Angel for your lovely comments.
Interloper - you always make me smile. Thankyou

hugs!!

Paul Wilson

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4 posted 2006-11-30 03:21 PM

Chris...Tender sad words from such a lovely heart. I hope all is well...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Margherita
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Eternity

5 posted 2006-11-30 03:22 PM

Soft melancholy so beautifully rendered, dear Chris!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

6 posted 2006-11-30 03:33 PM

Yup, it's one of those days all right.

Excellent one Chris.
Miss and love ya~Teed

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Nightshade

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7 posted 2006-11-30 04:24 PM

Paul - What a lovely thing to say - thankyou.
Everything is just fine. A mixture of a long dental appointment and heavy rains has put a damper on my day...only for today.

Margherita - always a pleasure to see a comment from you. Many thanks.

Nancy Lee - Yup, sure is. Love & Miss you too! Hugs!!

The Lady
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8 posted 2006-11-30 05:14 PM

perfect for a day like today Chris
you do that so well

Marge Tindal

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9 posted 2006-11-30 05:39 PM

ChrisLane~
Listen ... do you hear it ???

Go ahead ... open a window !!!

It's ~*Marge*~ ~

On the lives of all that I hold dear ...
I would swear to you ...
that last night, I DREAMED you had written a Rictameter !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
HONEST INJUN !!!!!!!!!

Oh my gosh ... and this one is PERFECTLY done~
Just PERFECT !!!

I love it ... I love it ... I love it ~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

MoonShadow
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Dark side of the Moon.

10 posted 2006-11-30 05:50 PM

Lovely metaphorical phrases to create a moving analogy...

"Stream from panes of sad eyes"

"Streaking my heart's framed window with regret"

reminds me that I believe the eyes are windows to the soul...

I really enjoyed reading this.. touched my soul.. thank you, Nightshade.

Nightshade

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11 posted 2006-11-30 05:52 PM

Thankyou & Hugs Lady.

Marge - Really?! That's incredible. Thankyou so much for your always kind words.
Hugs!!

Nightshade

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12 posted 2006-11-30 05:53 PM

Moonshadow - such a lovely comment..thankyou so much. Hugs!

Goldenrose
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13 posted 2006-11-30 06:02 PM

Raindrops are the clensing of our souls, tears are the emtoins of a beautiful heart, thank you for this ...

Goldenrose.

At the touch of love, everyone becomes poets. Plato 427 BC-348.

Nightshade

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14 posted 2006-11-30 06:23 PM

Awww..thankyou kind Goldenrose!

miscellanea
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OH

15 posted 2006-11-30 06:32 PM

Chris, I like this form very much, but know little of how it works or the pattern. I love your play on words; I think it subtly emphasizes the sadness. I hope all is well with you. Wish I could spend more time, but am inundated with work. Until next time, be well.

cathy

Nightshade

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16 posted 2006-11-30 07:05 PM

hello cathy!! Sweet of you to take the time to read and comment. I appreciate it.
hugs, Chris

miscellanea
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17 posted 2006-11-30 07:23 PM

Chris,

Glad I could. You all are like family to me in a way, and I miss hanging out here! Sure enjoy the poetry and good folks!

cathy

Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 2006-11-30 08:23 PM

Oh Chris I would hate to see one single tear fall from your eyes but I know how cleansing tears can be.

This is a lovely rictameter sweetie and by the way? That new pic of you....absolutely beautiful dear lady.

Needless to say, I have missed you and your shine, immensely.

Hugs you.

c'mere....

Nightshade

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19 posted 2006-11-30 10:05 PM

Donna, you are just too sweet!
Thankyou so much for the lovely comments and compliments. Hugs!

passing shadows
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displaced

20 posted 2006-11-30 10:52 PM

what a read for a night like tonight...windy and getting colder and raining off and on

beautifully sadly done!

Nightshade

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21 posted 2006-11-30 11:15 PM

Thankyou dear Dixiedoodlegirl !! Hugs!

ctowen
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22 posted 2006-12-01 01:45 PM

... glad I stopped in and caught a few raindrops!

a nourishing piece!

Ct

Nightshade

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23 posted 2006-12-01 02:19 PM

So nice to see you in Pip Ct!!
Thanks & Hugs!

JamesMichael
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24 posted 2006-12-01 05:06 PM

Nice writing...James

Nightshade

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25 posted 2006-12-01 06:00 PM

hello James, thankyou very much. Hugs!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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26 posted 2006-12-02 02:37 AM

this writing is simply exquisite!!

Be well
Roniece

Honeybunch
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27 posted 2006-12-02 03:05 AM

Outstanding write, Chris, and this ...

"while the earth drinks with disregard
of a love lost to time"

seems to just be the way of things, doesn't it?

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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28 posted 2006-12-02 03:30 AM

I read this but forgot to comment on it! It's beautifully penned.... and I enjoyed the read..

Be well
Roniece

Nightshade

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29 posted 2006-12-02 12:08 PM

Honeybunch - yes sometimes that is just the way love goes...with time. Thankyou.

Roniece - thankyou and hugs for reading and commenting.

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