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CharmedOne615 Junior Member
since 2006-11-22
Posts 12 |
1 LOVE by Darius Boglin To say that he was happy Would be like a slap in the face Although at first he was, it was his first time Now forever changed, and his faith restored Together they took the journey down the Road of romance earlier that what is right After that first day on the side of the highway He had waited 20 long years And finally after such a long wait He though it was a sign from the divine His 1LOVE had finally been delivered to him In a blue hat He knew he had to go away... Yet he assumed he was strong enough to endure The ice cold stabs of time He thought... His sunny days slowly began to fade into Restless nights, as he suffered without his love He soon realized he was not as strong as he thought And threw away what meant the most to him. His 1LOVE, he never meant to hurt To hear his love on the other side in tears Killed him without him even realizing it His soul...utterly detached, An "ID" out of control, Without "Ego" and "SuperEgo" to keep it in check And the day before everyone gave thanks He realized that he was empty. Give me one moment in time, I will race destiny To repair what was eternally shattered. 1LOVE |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is a complex piece with lots running through it. It intrigued me and I will have to think on it some more. Regards Kethry a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this touches me as a bit sad I like it |
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wredgranny Member
since 2006-11-18
Posts 493Ky. USA |
Give me one moment in time, I will race destiny To repair what was eternally shattered. 1LOVE Siyo CharmedOne I am not so sure about this thing "love" but I like your poem very much.How many also wish one moment in time to repair a hurt,most eh?
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
His sunny days slowly began to fade into Restless nights, as he suffered without his love He soon realized he was not as strong as he thought And threw away what meant the most to him. ~*~ Welcome to Passions. I think the above passage speaks most as to what your poem is encompassing, and I look forward to seeing more from you. |
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