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My Broken Heart
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My Broken Heart |
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journie Junior Member
since 2006-11-13
Posts 18Missouri |
Only time will tell if this broken heart will mend. What once I thought was true love has now come to an end. The dreams I had of us together, is gone like leaves blowing in the wind. Now I must go on with my life without you by my side. You have taken away my dreams and desires of what use to be a beautiful romance filled with passionate fire. A fire between us that no one could put out. The fire is gone and so are you, a midst my tears I must know bid you adieu. [This message has been edited by journie (11-14-2006 11:37 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HiJournie~ Another write from the heart of you~  May I suggest that you try setting your poem in a form that would make it easier to read ? "Only time will tell if this broken heart will mend. What once I thought was true love has now come to an end. The dreams I had of us together, is gone like leaves blowing in the wind. Now I must go on with my life without you by my side. You have taken away my dreams and desires of what use to be a beautiful romance filled with passionate fire. A fire between us that no one could put out. The fire is gone and so are you, a midst my tears I must know bid you adieu." By breaking the thoughts into stanzas or verses ... it makes it a more pleasureable read, I think~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Journie~ GREAT !!!! Atta way to go gal~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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