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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-10-24 11:44 AM


Rewrite repost:
Father Time

Four and twenty black words baked in a rhyme
When the rhyme was read it spoke of father time
It spoke of prime, middle and old age
And each was given time and a page

Youth was full of fire and stroke
Paid no attention to the smoke
And ridiculed the thought of death
It felt he breathed forever’s breath

While middle age could see its fault
And brought it to a sudden halt
Searching for the peaceful strings
To sew the garment of all things

Than age began to sum it up
And put it in a buttercup
He named the cup the Holy Grail
And offered it to no avail

For life is in a constant pour
The roaring of beginnings core
The changing that would seem a crime
This grain of sand that counts our time


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suthern
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1 posted 2006-10-24 01:16 PM


This is fantastic!!! *S*

Of course... I'll be singing that song all day. *G*

inot2B
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2 posted 2006-10-24 01:50 PM


Only one who has lived a long life as you, knows how to sum up time with a rhyme.  
Wish I didn't waste so much of my time worrying about the years, and just enjoyed them as they are given to me.

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3 posted 2006-10-24 02:12 PM


Enjoyed today's pearls of wisdom so much Sy!
Hope you are well and enjoying a beautiful autumn.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

XOx Uriah xOX
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4 posted 2006-10-24 03:56 PM


::smiles::   Another exquisite work.  
Ah  I honestly believe this to be the first time I have used the word "exquisite".  I am pleased and see it fitting that it fell upon you.   :: bows ::

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2006-10-24 04:59 PM


suthern
Couldn't ask for more than fantastic.

inot2B
Not to worry that old man river just keeps moving along. LOL

Nancy,
Me and autumn are one.

Uriah,
You are not only wise but kind too.
My friend  

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6 posted 2006-10-24 05:19 PM


I like the rhythm of this one, but I don't like the fact that every now and then I feel Father Time breathing down my neck.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2006-10-24 05:31 PM


Pilgrimage
LOL don't we all.

The Lady
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8 posted 2006-10-25 12:22 PM




I enjoyed this
Sir Sy


Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2006-10-25 08:13 AM


Lady
And I enjoyed your comment.

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10 posted 2006-10-25 09:07 AM


Seymour~
There is one thing I know for SURE ...
Father Time gave you beautiful rhyme
to share the wisdom from your ink ...~

I LOVE THIS~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -         noles1@totcon.com     

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2006-10-25 11:17 AM


Marge,
No more than I love you.

twinkyfl1
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12 posted 2006-12-16 10:33 PM


Sy, you're so right and you are a genious.

Time waits for no man, and no-one is guaranteed tomorrow.

So, gather your rosebuds while ye may!

To thy own self be true

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2006-12-16 10:52 PM


twinkyfl1
A very sweet reply, thank you

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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14 posted 2006-12-17 12:47 PM


Sir Sy, true and wonderful words here! RDB x
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