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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-10-19 07:23 AM


you didn't say much mouth wise
more body language politics
but I liked the words
and how you put them in places
then wore them just for my eyes

parking lots are so informal
it is hard to find dance partners
but your doors were open
and the song was appropriate
and I was available with a wave

you were taller than I realized
as we saw eye to eye perfectly
while sitting on the boardwalk
discussing hand shake etiquette
and watching gulls sort gourmet

it is tomorrow today later now
I can't find my keys in the sand
but then it is just a bucket full
with a note of please and thank you
and you are welcome to stay longer

if the grave stones don't make you crazy
______________

daark





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passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-10-19 07:25 AM


"parking lots are so informal
it is hard to find dance partners"

indeed

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2006-10-19 07:31 AM


ms ps..thanks for driving by
Moonkist
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3 posted 2006-10-19 12:39 PM


Nice moments captured here, Daark Stranger... perhaps twas on a lover's lane, no?  I've had dark fun moments like that... your write brought them to mind...

Namaste,
~Moonkist

Freedom Now

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2006-10-19 12:47 PM


ms moon..perhaps, actually a very private estate in the Santa Barbara might fit too..thanks for the eyes ms
seraphin
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5 posted 2006-10-19 01:52 PM


Dark,

I read these piercing moments like a peeping tom and always end up amazed at how you control the uncontrollable.

You make it impossible to quote but a single line as standing out, since the entire work is outstanding.

But there is one thing I would like to differ with you about. I have found a few dance partners in parking lots. They are not difficult to find, rather, it is difficult to find ones that dance well.

As always,
this too I adored
Sandra

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2006-10-19 02:00 PM


ms sandra..thanks for the read and reply..and if you are ever in the same parking lot please save a dance for me.
The Lady
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7 posted 2006-10-19 02:29 PM





body language politics Stranger?
independent? with leanings?
leave the keys in the sand
I like this  
yup I do…


seraphin
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8 posted 2006-10-19 02:32 PM


You have my word, sir. I do look forward to it!

Sandra

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2006-10-19 03:04 PM


ladyone, thanks lady friend for visiting the sand box for a few.

________________

ms sandra, thanks for the promise

Edward Grim
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10 posted 2006-10-19 03:54 PM


Dark, your style of writing is a pioneer in modern poetry. A style that is not matched and too good to even think about overlooking. You're a great role model for poetry of different tones.    Cheers   - Ed

Once you are truly insane, it’s all picnics with Kafka after that. See, it’s the process of going crazy that you gotta worry about.

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2006-10-19 04:08 PM


Brother Ed, now my toupee will be stretched..(kidding) most humble thanks guy for the review and comment.
Sunshine
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12 posted 2006-10-19 10:03 PM



Well, you already know how I think of your writing...a modern day special man.

But, given the political feel,
and the last line,
I can sense a whole lot of grasping
[for votes]
in this one.

You've got mine.



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-20-2006 08:00 AM).]

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2006-10-20 07:07 AM


ms sun...shhhhh must be a secret, thanks lady friend
Angel4aKing
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14 posted 2006-11-10 02:11 AM


Parking lots so informal and dancing partners hard to find. You brought tears to my eyes here, and a tug of pain to my heart. Powerful words. bye 4 now, Kingsangel

kingsangel

playing.with.crayons
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15 posted 2006-11-10 05:57 AM


reading some of your pieces is like walking through a poetic cemetary on a beautiful but foggy night. Dark and mysterious and haunting.
All good things, considered.
beautiful write. xx Cheye

Dark Stranger
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16 posted 2006-11-10 07:09 AM


Angel, thank you for the review

_____________

playingcolors, you bless me, thank you for the read

Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2006-11-10 08:52 AM


M'friend, you already know that I am but a humble follower...   You take poetry, and you make it yours.  No one does it quite like you do, and oh btw?  Yeah, I am addicted.  
Dark Stranger
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18 posted 2006-11-10 09:22 AM


ms gs, my pleasure to offer you a fix anytime, thank you my friend
secondhanddreampoet
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19 posted 2006-11-10 12:58 PM


Having read this interesting poem.....
I can't help but 'seek out'...much more of the work of this 'dark' wordsmith.... Though I have 'oft spents a great deal of time in graveyards along the way... I have found that therein, I tend to 'go sane'
(rather than 'crazy'!)..... the dead can be so much more calm, wise, and consistent than the living! [dark *smile*!]

--- this complimentary comment is from a 'stormy' dark-light poet (who has no 'middle ground) who doesn't 'do' shades of grey.

Dark Stranger
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20 posted 2006-11-10 01:03 PM


friend secondhand' thank you for the most gracious review...
aziza
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21 posted 2006-11-12 06:28 PM


Ditto, Ditto, Ditto, Ditto, and even some more dittoes to spice up the dittoes already ditto'ing.  Nice toupee by the way.

az

Dark Stranger
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22 posted 2006-11-13 07:03 AM


ms az, shhhhh it is really a baseball cap with hair..thanks ms
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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23 posted 2006-11-14 05:22 AM


while sitting on the boardwalk
discussing hand shake etiquette
and watching gulls sort gourmet


Oh I loved this!! and I would love to shake hands with you any day Mr Dark Stranger - hmmm I'm assuming you are a Mr yes??  

Loved the visual and the storyline

Be well
Roniece

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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24 posted 2006-11-14 05:23 AM


yes, I'm thinking right you are a Mr - a very delightful one at that!

Be well
Roniece

Dark Stranger
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25 posted 2006-11-14 06:56 AM


ms bruce, yes lady friend, I would think you would find me to be a mr. and it would be a pleasure to shake hands with you I am sure, humble thanks
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