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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you didn't say much mouth wise more body language politics but I liked the words and how you put them in places then wore them just for my eyes parking lots are so informal it is hard to find dance partners but your doors were open and the song was appropriate and I was available with a wave you were taller than I realized as we saw eye to eye perfectly while sitting on the boardwalk discussing hand shake etiquette and watching gulls sort gourmet it is tomorrow today later now I can't find my keys in the sand but then it is just a bucket full with a note of please and thank you and you are welcome to stay longer if the grave stones don't make you crazy ______________ daark |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"parking lots are so informal it is hard to find dance partners" indeed  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ps..thanks for driving by |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Nice moments captured here, Daark Stranger... perhaps twas on a lover's lane, no? I've had dark fun moments like that... your write brought them to mind... Namaste, ~Moonkist Freedom Now |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms moon..perhaps, actually a very private estate in the Santa Barbara might fit too..thanks for the eyes ms |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Dark, I read these piercing moments like a peeping tom and always end up amazed at how you control the uncontrollable. You make it impossible to quote but a single line as standing out, since the entire work is outstanding. But there is one thing I would like to differ with you about. I have found a few dance partners in parking lots. They are not difficult to find, rather, it is difficult to find ones that dance well. As always, this too I adored Sandra |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sandra..thanks for the read and reply..and if you are ever in the same parking lot please save a dance for me. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
body language politics Stranger? independent? with leanings? leave the keys in the sand I like this yup I do… |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
You have my word, sir. I do look forward to it! Sandra |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone, thanks lady friend for visiting the sand box for a few. ________________ ms sandra, thanks for the promise |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Dark, your style of writing is a pioneer in modern poetry. A style that is not matched and too good to even think about overlooking. You're a great role model for poetry of different tones. Cheers - Ed Once you are truly insane, it’s all picnics with Kafka after that. See, it’s the process of going crazy that you gotta worry about. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Brother Ed, now my toupee will be stretched..(kidding) most humble thanks guy for the review and comment. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, you already know how I think of your writing...a modern day special man. But, given the political feel, and the last line, I can sense a whole lot of grasping [for votes] in this one. You've got mine.  [This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-20-2006 08:00 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...shhhhh must be a secret, thanks lady friend |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Parking lots so informal and dancing partners hard to find. You brought tears to my eyes here, and a tug of pain to my heart. Powerful words. bye 4 now, Kingsangel kingsangel |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
reading some of your pieces is like walking through a poetic cemetary on a beautiful but foggy night. Dark and mysterious and haunting. All good things, considered. beautiful write. xx Cheye |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Angel, thank you for the review _____________ playingcolors, you bless me, thank you for the read |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
M'friend, you already know that I am but a humble follower...  You take poetry, and you make it yours. No one does it quite like you do, and oh btw? Yeah, I am addicted.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms gs, my pleasure to offer you a fix anytime, thank you my friend |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Having read this interesting poem..... I can't help but 'seek out'...much more of the work of this 'dark' wordsmith.... Though I have 'oft spents a great deal of time in graveyards along the way... I have found that therein, I tend to 'go sane' (rather than 'crazy'!)..... the dead can be so much more calm, wise, and consistent than the living! [dark *smile*!] --- this complimentary comment is from a 'stormy' dark-light poet (who has no 'middle ground) who doesn't 'do' shades of grey. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
friend secondhand' thank you for the most gracious review... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ditto, Ditto, Ditto, Ditto, and even some more dittoes to spice up the dittoes already ditto'ing. Nice toupee by the way. az |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az, shhhhh it is really a baseball cap with hair..thanks ms |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
while sitting on the boardwalk discussing hand shake etiquette and watching gulls sort gourmet Oh I loved this!! and I would love to shake hands with you any day Mr Dark Stranger - hmmm I'm assuming you are a Mr yes?? Loved the visual and the storyline Be well Roniece |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
yes, I'm thinking right you are a Mr - a very delightful one at that! Be well Roniece |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bruce, yes lady friend, I would think you would find me to be a mr. and it would be a pleasure to shake hands with you I am sure, humble thanks |
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