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of ecstacy with my eyes closed
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of ecstacy with my eyes closed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I caught spirit sharp and clean awake aware and wanting me snowflake manna pirouette voicing point to arabesque yearning in a swan curve neck eyes averted in demure for no reflect can honor such of this that is so seldom seen dervishing of galaxies spiral coiled gloss coaxing my chin to height as it were held by one pleased appraisingly as glitter from my lashes fell to dust my blush with mirrorings of ecstacy with my eyes closed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, And that's not easy I might add.  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ok poetry queen 'bout time you got back home pout moremoremore |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful!! Incredible images Karen! Love ya lady~ Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
holding the essential without compromise, without the care to be popular...expression comes forth full circle, using languages to seek, to survive, by seizing upon some truth...you are the run away from societies logic, into simply, logic beyond logic...thoughts energised into itself, manifesation of luminous...oh lady...unique and elegant prose, wtih of course that open secret humor of yours...  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I think I will have one of what you are having.  Oh...and yes, that was beeuteefull as well, liked the internal rhyme devine m'witch. |
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Lisey Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36UK (Wales) |
i loved it!! - bit advanced for my lil head but i throughly enjoyed it! |
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Dublin Boy Member
since 2006-08-26
Posts 102UK |
Some beautiful phrasing in this excellent poem--I was blown away by your use of words. Cheers, Bill |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ser, I agree with every comment on this page, especially Lee's. Awesome write, m'ladybug......jojo |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, Thank you for this M'dear, I do believe you've created a new verb ,"dervishing"! It would be my great honor to use this word, with your permission of course, for a Halloween poem as yet undiscribed. Pretty please? Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I always give docs what they want. Wish they'd do the same for me.  Thank everyone for reading.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
lol at the dervisher verb love the choreography of this |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, sounds pretty much like the time I "caught spirit". Remember it well for I'm pretty sure you won't see it again. Once is enough though - right? But we can always say it's the coffee and not the substance of ... love! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'd like to clear something up here. I didn't write this about the drug known as "ecstacy". The other working title, was "how he makes me feel" But considering my reputation, the confusion is understandable.  Thanks for reading. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I've read this a couple of times, and each time I fail to find the proper words so, will just say, as usual Karen, out of this world, and fatabulous. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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jwebs Junior Member
since 2006-08-15
Posts 25Ft Hood, TX |
I'm baffled. I read it and read and I know that I don't have anything to say. well anything other than this is an inspirational poem. not everyone gets added to my library, but this is a poem to read when I'm in search of a song... No one is more professional than I. I am a Noncommissioned Officer, a leader of soldiers. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Lee said it better than I ever could... enjoy reading you always and I know the meaning of this one.  M |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen....I caught a vision of a mirror to the other side and an explore there into the depths of magic. You are, ya know...magic. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something wickedly lucid, and enjoyed |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
It is nice to read your poetry again. -Juju -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
<3 |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Serenity, Your E being not available, and with your permission, I submit the following usage of your wonderfully creative verb. For you, to be reposted this Halloween... " Spun From Stone " Abruptly been awakened dervishing out of a dream with vacant eyes unfocused as of yet upon this world To slice through fog like layers comprehension it woud seem arrives an instant later as I peer from this fascade With frozen stone of talons fastened tightly to this ledge await the grip to loosen as the hour comes to close to glide the night air currents freed again from anchorage All Hallows' Eve rejoining this, the world of flesh and bone. Too long enslaved by those who scurry mindlessly below my pulse begins to quicken as I watch them from above The dervishing intensifies each molecule aglow long centuries behind me now I'm weightless to the skies An instrument of mythos having found the means of flight exhilarant I circle dervishing into the night. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now who would guess two people could take dervishing to such a supreme level. Heck all I ever manage to do is fall down after. Great poem Dr. Moose sir. She does inspire that is for sure, and this will thrill her I bet. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
when speaks the swan with wing on watery wind I writhe in her words as the gypsy in his violin enjoyed you here karen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling wide--oh the places ya'll take me! and this would certainly do me honor, especially on my favorite holiday of the year Doc. Oh. holiday. doc? Doc Holiday? grin "ooooh yer a holiday..." criminy, I'm quoting the Bee Gees!  coffffffffffffffffeeeeeeeeeeeee and Thanks doc. *smile* you are lovely. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now that is what I'd call dervishly ecstatic writing! You are in a class all your own, Serene One! Loving Light, Linda |
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