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The Breath of Life
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The Breath of Life |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
The Breath of Life A puff of air, a fluff of seeds, While all the world holds its breath. The dandelion only needs A little girl who gaily deeds Her gift of life in place of death. For dandelions have no hope To spread their seedlings far and wide; No other resource helps them cope To cover Nature’s breathless scope, Except on childhood’s wistful ride. One puff of air will help to spread Some progeny of Nature’s weed. Though gardeners will come to dread The budding in their flowerbed Of playful children’s favorite seed. For children know that, weed or not, A pretty, yellow flower grows; Considering with gleeful thought --The beauty Mother Nature brought-- Springs magically where child’s breath sows. Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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Sarkany Junior Member
since 2006-10-14
Posts 32 |
Hi Another masterful verse. I am most impressed with your craftsmanship, insight and poetic style. Sarkany |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Sarkany. We meet again! "Another masterful verse. I am most impressed with your craftsmanship, insight and poetic style." Who wouldn't kill for such a review (poetically speaking, of course!)? You are officially now my number one fan! Yeah, team! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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DreamerSpirit Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 240Buenos Aires, Argentina |
Hi Jl! Excellent Reading, i liked it a lot. thanks for sharing! Denis |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, Denis. I was in a wistful, childish place (which is really one of my favorites!) when I wrote this piece. John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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Sarkany Junior Member
since 2006-10-14
Posts 32 |
Hi John Consider me a team member. I am the real thing not a pretender I served 24 years in the Navy. I am a retired QMC. Sarkany |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Sarkany. Welcome to the team! My dad was in the Navy SeaBees for 27 years, and retired out as an E-9. He was offered a position of Lt., jg, but he turned it down. He would have had to stay in for another 4 - 8 years, and I guess that he had enough by then! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Loved the voice of this. Surrender to the innocent minds of childish play. So simple, and so beautiful in it's less traveled places. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I like your wistful, childlike moods and I like the little girl who blows the seed while the whole world holds its breath there is nothing more important than a little girl and dandelion fluff enchanting poem John xo |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Another lovely poem! I'll be keeping an eye out for you now. (smiles) You have a wonderful way of weaving you're feelings into words. Instant fav! ~Kira |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, TD. Thanks for your wonderful comments on this poem. I am always enchanted by children who are "seriously" at play. Plus, I used to love dandelions, too. Now I don't see them anymore, but there are lovely xeriscapes here in the desert... John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, TL. That's because I AM wistful and childlike.  "...and I like the little girl who blows the seed while the whole world holds its breath there is nothing more important than a little girl and dandelion fluff..." EXACTLY! If only everyone knew this. Thanks, TL, for the enchanting comments. John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, Kira. I'll send up signals when I post again! I want you to see it... In the meantime, thanks for the nice coments! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi John....What a joy it is to read this!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely enchanting John! Personally I don't believe there are such things as weeds. Since you don't have any dandelions, I have a yard full I can send you? Oh! I don't think I can send plants across the border.  Loved this write..yup sure did. Hugs~Nancy Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Ahh..the old struggle with the 'weed'...the symbol of Man's attempt to control Nature. A dandelion, or the cherished rose? Which will, you think, survive the sixth mass extinction? (Yes, there is symbolism meant in that.....LOL) They also make a good salad. CG |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Martie. Thanks for reading it! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Nancy! "Personally I don't believe there are such things as weeds." Thus my poem, "The Weed." I think I posted it here. Oh, and they can't stop you from sending seeds (I don't think?)! Thanks for reading... John xo |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, CG. Where will it all end? Probably without dandelions OR roses...  "They also make a good salad." Mmmmm. I love food... John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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BugBuggy Member
since 2005-12-19
Posts 130michigan |
oh what memories that creates within my mind thank you for sharing that with us all |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Bunny! You're welcome. I am happy to be a vehicle to a happy memory... Happy, happy, joy, joy, Happy, happpy, joy... John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, James. John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
What a lovely, lyrical, fresh "Breath of Life"! Would the little boy in you like to come out to play with the little girl in me?  Delightfully refreshing, JLH!!! Loving Light, EA & Linda Lou |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Love this ... "The beauty Mother Nature brought-- Springs magically where child’s breath sows." All the children (and adults) do the same things at some time or other and yet we feel sometimes so distanced from each other. Enjoyed the read, John. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautiful read. :-) Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Your critique message is inaccurate. You write you are "fairly skillful" which is quite a measured distance from what is displayed in this work. You manage to do something many people are not capable of, remember what it is like to be a child. My daughter has declared our yard a protected haven for misunderstood plant-life (weeds), and I manage a fine crop of dandelions every year. Your poem does justice to both my daughter and my yard A wonderful work, in imagery, meter, and rememberence. I will make a point of looking for your futher thoughts. Do count me as a new found fan. Sandra |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, EA & Linda Lou (one and the same?)! Would I?! I live for my childish...um..."youthful" side! Thanks for your refreshing comments AND your wonderful offer! John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Honeybunch. Not me! I am one with my inner child. In fact, many people tell me to "Grow up!" John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, froggy. Beautiful comment! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Sandra. Thank you so much for your wonderfully kind comments. I am not used to such praise, so excuse me while I catch my "Breath..." You manage to do something many people are not capable of, remember what it is like to be a child. As I said, I am one with my inner child...! My daughter has declared our yard a protected haven for misunderstood plant-life (weeds), and I manage a fine crop of dandelions every year. Good for your daughter! Not only is that very cute, but one day she'll probably save the world! Your poem does justice to both my daughter and my yard... What a delightful thought. A wonderful work, in imagery, meter, and rememberence. I will make a point of looking for your futher thoughts. Do count me as a new found fan. I love fans, though I am not used to having them. Oh, boy! NOW, I have to work twice as hard to keep up my standards! John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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