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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He spoke. He sang notation as was written by the angels. His eyes were sad reprisal, glad, swallowing the angles of the sky in points of light in cries of "why-oh-why-can't-I" Life illumination died, fingered as a matchhead fried bubbled in the spoon of sighs like the bridge and sewerage and death became romanticized as ritual devotion. "We ought to say a prayer," I said. I pulled the strap of that-is-that. Savoring the taste of him once more on a "spin again" as all his friends were gathering nodding in agreement and toasting him in memory- witnessed by the drool. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah sweetie...  Check your email. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hugs, You write the heart so very fluently. TD |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
Ok. What is this about? lol My head hurts, but in a good way. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen..sometimes there are no right words. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I feel the grieving and think I do understand this one, Ser...and all I can do is toast him, too. ....jo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karen? C'mere .. Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ok, now I got to re-reading this and think I might have put the wrong interpretation on it the first time. Tell me if I'm right....death is not something to drool over....it has been glorified through religious practices? The more I read this, the sadder I find the poem to be. Especially....with how the mourners handle it. Am I way off? The complexity of your poems always astounds me...how you are able to speak a world in just a few stanzas......jojo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Life illumination died, fingered as a matchhead fried bubbled in the spoon of sighs like the bridge and sewerage and death became romanticized as ritual devotion." Superb writing...every junkie's like a setting sun... ...but now you have gotten Neil Young stuck in my head. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
for some strange reason, I'm thinking Jerry Garcia now |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling, this one needs some tweaking, but for the most part it will probably stay just the way it is... and smiling wider, to my silent reader friend, and nodding (the good kind) who reminded me of what a professor once told me-- "The art of poetry is fifty percent inspiration and the depiction of that--and fifty percent interpretation" So instead of explaining, I think I'll just let this one be whatever ya'll want it to be. I appreciate very much, your comments, warmth and generosity. Love to all.  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I like what your professor said. You know, this is why I will never become a poet. I am too selfish of my experiences than to leave them open to others' imaginations and interpretations. You, Ms. Serenity, are very unselfish with the space between the lines, where one can read and interpret as best suits them. miscellaena |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...Interperation...I feel this goes alot deeper than the words suggest. Thats why I enjoy your poetry so much. It allows everyone to draw their own conclusions. Maybe a sacrifice of sorts is my conclusion...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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