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unnecessary storms |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Final vows offset much of the craters that I can no longer fight or deny libido sublime compared to straw that erupts in life walking stations of extreme testing…. wanting to run the distance stone on the ground keep my feet from feeling violent rejection darting through the darkness the owl is a cruel one I sometime fear peculiar agony perhaps a penance stunning in severity incisive….powerful as guilt crashes down pincushion of bi-polar hangs in the air (could it be?) along with the after shock of not knowing the disorientation that’s been pinned to my flesh forcing me to my knees stinging, I resemble a dog with it’s tail between it’s legs what dignity is in that? fear spreads across my underwater sheen standing there stretching beyond what unthinkable discrepancy have I done? A dark pelican flaps her wings taking to the air heat rises on the skin of my cheeks like an ocean’s sweat dieing on the beach trying to clean the heavily stained apron darkened sunglasses licks my heart daring & strangely intimate she only imagines a face that is intensified by her posture impertinent conversation is her defense resting loosely on a marsh island which presses against me, breathing “be careful” “beware” I stand before a choir terrified close to desperation failing failing again and again… twisting my lips happiness, is a day blinded window light back flips brushing my knuckles scaping my knees assuming it was the worst my thoughtless moments slumping onto the white breast of what remains I dream of amputated legs gazing straight ahead aware of the scum of hesitancy formed knowing i dare not mention the day it was created mysterious these 10 years sometime, the human psyche can be a cruel one do I bring these things upon myself separated and snipped off the end of the butterfly only wanting time apart solitude of being recognizes love recognizes envy I listen to ridiculous things tormenting lapping my boat screaming release me… I don’t want to paddle anymore I don’t want to tread water anymore think what you will… I’ve eaten enough rejection to last a lifetime denial always bites that place in a woman’s heart that can be touched [This message has been edited by LeeJ (09-05-2006 10:29 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ Turmoil is a time change it will pass. Good mornig sweet.  |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
If I could reach you, I would tell you storms only rage for a short time. Winds howl loudest when your mind is already in a scream-state, and tomorrow could be the very calm you've not dared imagined. But I think a woman of your depth already knows this. Very powerful write, very powerful emotions. Sandra |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ You took me with your dreamworld...a place familiar to me but left behind thankfully...and if you couldn't write it down, would you explode? Thank you poetry!!  |
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Dublin Boy Member
since 2006-08-26
Posts 102UK |
A very imaginative and powerful poem, LeeJ. Your word-choices and phrasing are exemplary and really convey inner turmoil with perception and intensity. Regards, Bill |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
::smiles:: The surface winds converge with the atmosphere and the energy build up creates storms. Ah Much like the way thoughts build up and cause periods where the spheres of split-mind become unstable and shake the surface below. i.e. You think too much. LOL (((LeeJ))) A wonderful write !!! as always. Even though... I have never witnessed an "unnecessary" storm. ::smiles:: |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A most excellent write Lee. You have a way of drawing in the reader with your words. Well done. Hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
LeeJ - Life is made up of "ridiculous things" and one day we'll learn to laugh at them. I've trained myself away from storms but I can remember them and the effect they have on one but you, my dear, put it all so expertly into words. Only a master can do what you do - you know, you know! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i always love your words of strength  My spirit will rise above the sea~ There will be no drowning of my soul or me~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"denial always bites that place in a woman’s heart that can be touched" painful LeeJ and so well done... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
LeeJ, Anxioty is fuel. We use it for many things in our lives. The miles per gallon is up to the user. Good luck on your journey. Doc |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I echo all the above replies!!! You touch deep with your impassioned words, m'dear Lee J. Sending you a warm, lovin' hug, Linda |
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jwebs Junior Member
since 2006-08-15
Posts 25Ft Hood, TX |
excellent poem. been there a time or two that's for certain. it's poems like this that can boggle the mind with hidden poems within them. As I read the poem, I noticed something peculiar. Read the first out of every four typed lines. I don't know what was more powerful, the poem itself or the poem with in the poem... excellent either way. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
want to thank each and everyone of you for your kind comments...and always your support. if it helps, I write as my mind works, sometimes it's moving at warp speed, and I'm trying to look at the ying and yang of things...trying to maintain the stability of positive thinking, reassure that all forces are ever present...can't help it? Many people find it difficult to follow, let alone understand. Many thanks Pipsters your all such a great group of poets/writers and friends. |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
This was a moving poem. One of the better one's I have read in a thread. Kudos on a well penned write. Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I almost missed this. Glad I didn't  Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Am reading... understanding this one. love to you, martyjo |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Your God given talent is thinking, and then placing those thoughts in words for others to enjoy. Very nice read Lee J. JL Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful read, wonderful poet! RDB |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Though touching a woman's heart is admirable, it's also alot of fun trying to get there....hope you're doing well sweets... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn woman! you always put me in awe! |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Wonderful imagery created by beautiful words. Thanks for sharing this. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
"Think what you will.... I've eaten enough rejection to last a lifetime." Very strong... and quotable... Nicely done. |
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